User talk:Slim125

That's not true. Whereas is redundant with differs. Slim125 (talk) 20:09, 27 March 2009 (UTC)


 * If I knew how to create a diagram on Wikipedia, then I'd diagram this sentence for you. Instead, I'll just say that "programs leading to the MA are usually centered on the scholarly, academic, or critical study of the field" is a complete sentence on its own.  Therefore, you have created a comma splice by leaving it in the sentence without the "whereas," which must follow from the previous word "while."  I can think of compromise sentences that could split the current sentence in two, but it is fine right now.  Nonetheless, we could try removing the qualifying phrase ("while an academic program"), leaving this: "The MFA differs from the Master of Arts in that the MFA, centers around practice in a particular field, whereas programs leading to the MA are usually centered on the scholarly, academic, or critical study of the field." What do you think?  Josh a brewer (talk) 18:24, 30 March 2009

I'll have to defer to you that 'whereas' works. It seemed to me that the first part set up a dependent clause that needed no conjunction for the second part.