User talk:Smalf002/Susan Folwell

The work being reviewed is by Smalf002, who wrote about Susan Folwell. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Smalf002/sandbox After reading the article, it wasn't difficult to determine that the page is on the right track. The author stays on topic throughout the article as the author talks about Folwell's life and career. Although there's plenty of bullet points, they're all related to the topic and it seems like the author knows what the author's planning for the final draft. Since the author hasn't passed away yet, the article is up to date ], especially with artworks. However, the descriptions about the artwork need a little beefing up. Help the readers visualize the artwork and are there any meanings behind it? The author's stance and point of view aren't skewed and are rather neutral since its a biography. The author did a great job of listing the sources used, however, a suggestion would be to number them so there's a little more organization. Overall, the article is on the right track to a finished product. It's organized and neutral but needs more beef to the content. Goodluck with editing and revising!

Zachdotlee (talk) 03:39, 25 February 2020 (UTC) zachdotlee