User talk:Smneu/sandbox

Introductory sentence – Good Summary – Good Context - Good Organization - Good Content – Good Balance – Excellent Tone – Good Citations - Excellent Sources - Excellent Completeness – Excellent New sections - n/a Reorganization - Good Gaps - Good Smaller additions – Good Coverage – Good Article body – Good

The first sentence could be flushed out with more information, or could be combined with the sentence following it. In the lead paragraph more information should be incorporated on why lyme disease has been moved to its own genus for clarity. The added subsection of culturing should have more information added to it or should be incorporated into another section. In the relapsing fever section, the groups that RF is split into could be added to create a fuller understanding. A history section could be useful to show the importance of the article and how it affected populations. In the pathobiology section there is a comment on differing citations so moving the citations where they belong in the sentence would be helpful.