User talk:Snapperfly/Hippocratic Corpus

Hi! You did a really good job of providing only factual statements and giving the summaries a neutral tone. I also like that you are talking about specific illnesses that are not mentioned in the current page that exists. In the section on Epidemics 1, I think you should specify what the "modern knowledge" is that you are referring to. Is that supported in one of your sources?

In the second section, the book that you are talking about is labeled in the section but to clarify you can still mention it to know exactly where Jaundice is mentioned. Also, it might be correct but you listed "money" as one of the ingredients for a remedy. To support the sentence where you include the prefixes, you should at a citation if you have one.

In the final section when you mention the Hippocratic Corpus, you might want to include the entire title to be specific of the "corpus." Also, I think it should be okay to not include the "odd one" because it makes the statement lose a bit of its neutrality. Lastly, I think you just need to add an overall heading and complete the citations for some of the articles since they are only labeled with their name. And possibly add more pictures! Overall, I really enjoyed reading your sections. It was interesting to understand the writings of the Hippocratic Corpus without having to read it myself. Eglegg2019 (talk) 00:01, 17 November 2019 (UTC)