User talk:Snaughton/sandbox

Hi Sahliqua, I really enjoyed your article. I see that you've added even more since I reviewed it last night. I think you have really promising work here, my only suggestion would be to work on organization. I outlined this a lot in the peer review. I think that you can work on flow and arrangement, and that will help bolster the content of your article as well as make it smoother to read. Also - you will definitely need to find more sources. I found a few more with some google searching so you can text me for the links if you want!