User talk:Snlyons/sandbox

The breadth of sources used in presenting the information you have here is already quite strong considering this was a rough draft. Though there are many sources listed, it would be helpful if they each were attached to specific pieces of information throughout the article, however it would seem like you are already aware of this as you have left spaces for citation after many of the statements throughout the article. The usage of links to other pages also would be quite helpful to the article, but again you seem to have thought of this as you mentioned including a link to the Society of Mary page in the article. Regarding the format, the content seems to be separated reasonable, though the references section would likely be better off with a larger underlined section header to make it easy to notice for quicker access. The inclusion of an image of Pedersen from the University of Dayton was also a good addition, though there is a bit of code found within the article before the image that looks like it should not be there. This is a very good looking article so far and I'll be interested to see how it pans out at the end of the quarter. Mitchell Booth (talk) 06:11, 12 May 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
This is a late review so most of the research done is good already. Adequate citing, good, neutral sources, non-biased write-up. The main feedback I have is to add a description about the uses of crown ethers today so the reader can understand why their discovery was important. In addition, a few sentences can be rewritten for clarity. For instance, "He is the only Nobel Prize laureate born in Korea other than Peace Prize laureate Kim Dae-jung" in the intro paragraph can be improved to "He is the first of two Nobel Prize laureates to be born in Nobel history. The second was the 2000 Peace Prize, awarded to former South-Korean president Kim Dae-jung". Also, I'd go through and delete some random spaces and formatting errors. Remove the "ie"s that interrupt sentences (I know they're for clarification but put them in parentheses or simply omit). It will greatly improve the flow of the article.Lithere (talk) 21:09, 3 June 2019 (UTC)