User talk:Snowdrop1995/Varlen Pen

Peer Review Complete
Hey, sorry for taking so long. I've added my comments after reviewing your sandbox draft. Great contents, and I could see the amount of effort you put in. Everything was great, to be honest. Just one passage needs to be more neutral than it is now. I also added some suggestions. Thank you. J43won 77 (talk) 15:00, 17 April 2023 (UTC)


 * No worries, thanks for the feedback! :) Snowdrop1995 (talk) 21:56, 19 April 2023 (UTC)

Peer Review Response
The peer reviews I received were very helpful and I agree with most of the edits suggested. My main focus going forward will be to neutralize the tone in a few sections, especially the 'Return to the Soviet Union' section. I will also aim to make some of the language more approachable and therefore easier to read.

As for the suggestion to include images and descriptions of Pen's artwork, I agree that the article may benefit from such a section, however I do not want to overwhelm the article with too much art description since it may cause the article to stray too far away from the artist himself. Due to copyright infringements, I will be unable to include images of the artwork, but I will aim to include relatively detailed descriptions of some of his most notable pieces of art (specifically the ones already referenced in my sources) since I do believe it is important to shed light on Pen's artwork as an extension of him as well.

Additionally, I will focus on fine-tuning some of the in-text citations. I believe they can be condensed and better organized.

Thank you for the feedback! Snowdrop1995 (talk) 22:07, 19 April 2023 (UTC)