User talk:Snowysusan/Archive 8

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Thank you. :) --Santoshdahal (talk) 09:11, 25 October 2012 (UTC)

Many thanks for the friendly help. --Staceydfla (talk) 22:29, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

Hello Susan, thank you for your review and the tips to improve my submissions. While creating my submissions I generally followed the already approved submissions. While Alpari UK or Oanda are considered from the same FOREX sphere, I checked the sources they have cited and there were some leading to not found pages. Can you please help me in determining the reliable sources for my articles. What should I consider to define if the source is reliable?

Thanks in advance Sincerely

Hranush Manukyan — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hranush1982 (talk • contribs) 06:28, 15 October 2012 (UTC)

Hello Susan, thank you for your help with my Ateronon submission. I was just trying to access it because I still have not formatted the references properly, but they now seem to have disappeared. Is this because someone else is currently editing them? Also, I think it was suggested somewhere that the submission needs more cross-headings? Are there standard Wikipedia cross-headings that should be used? Thanks very much --Meeahlo (talk) 21:00, 15 October 2012 (UTC) Meeahlo

Meeahlo

Also, do you mean I have created the same submission twice by accident? Meeahlo (talk) 21:05, 15 October 2012 (UTC)

Thanks, Susan. The content got mistakenly deleted. I've re-submitted the piece. Best, --Jeneva Holden (talk) 18:53, 17 October 2012 (UTC)

Thanks Susan. We have been busy adding citations to the article Equality Illinois. But, as you said, I need a change to a non-institutional name. Can/How I change it to my existing personal Wikipedia name, or do I need to create a new one? We appreciate your assistance. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Equality Illinois (talk • contribs) 21:21, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

Michael A. Robinson article
Susan, I need help understanding why you have considered our bio for Michael A. Robinson declined and him not worthy...He is working and has worked with A list artists and is a manager for the infamous Aisha Francis...What needs to be edited? I really would like to have him submitted. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bmikerob (talk • contribs) 19:55, 17 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Hi Bmikerob. Thanks for getting in touch with me at my talk page but it wasn't me who declined your article. If you look at the bottom of the notice on your talk page you will see it was MrT3366 who declined your article.  All I did was welcome you.  In any event, I do review articles and may be able to provide some guidance. (By the way please sign your posts when you leave a message on a talk page, it makes it easier to find you - instructions are at the top of my welcome message.)


 * With respect to the article... First, you may have a conflict that a reviewer might take issue with since your user name suggests you likely are Michael Robinson and/or closely connected with him through the company BmikeRob - writing articles about oneself or someone you are closely connected to is discouraged around here since it is hard to be neutral and objective, both of which are required before an article will be accepted. Please review wikipedia's guidance regarding neutral point of view and conflict of interest information.


 * Secondly, try to remember that what you are writing is an encyclopedia article so everything in it, particularly personal information about a living person, must be properly sourced. Sources relied upon must not only be independent but reliable.  It isn't that MrT3366 didn't think Mr. Robinson to be notable, the decline notice indicates that he rejected the article because your sources didn't establish his notability.  The criteria for notability of a person can be found at THIS PAGE.  It is a basic requirement that the subject not only be notable but that sufficient independent, reliable sources have discussed him or written about him that his notability is objectively verifiable through those sources.  Youtube, standing alone, will not be considered a reliable source. I note, however, in your opening you refer to San Jose Mercury but don't cite it.  If you include quotes from newspaper articles, you will need to provide the citation for the article and, preferably, a link to it so people can go to the article and see it. That would be an independent source.


 * None of the information in your article about Michael Robinson is sourced at all. Information about a living person that may be challenged will be removed from an article.  See the help page concerning biographies of living people and on that same page  sources for biographies. Sources such as the company website, personal websites, and twitter are not considered to be independent of the subject. Also, reverbnation is a blocked site at Wikipedia so you can not cite it as a source.


 * It may well be that Michael Robinson is extremely notable but there is no way to verify the information in your article through independent sources at the moment. Please provide sources for the information in your article and resubmit it.


 * If I can be of any further assistance, please feel free to contact me at my talk page. Snowysusan (talk) 08:38, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

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Thanks for the help --Nordosm (talk) 06:40, 20 October 2012 (UTC)

Robert Noel Blair
Thank you for editing this entry. R.N. Blair was born August 12 and can you add one space for each date, please? Bruce Blair links to someone else, needs unlink and new entry instead, to be filled in. Would you mind updating these? Thank you, SnowySusan.. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Paradisevillage (talk • contribs) 20:30, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

WikiProject:Articles for Creation October - November 2012 Backlog Elimination Drive
 WikiProject Articles for creation Backlog Elimination Drive WikiProject AFC is holding a one month long Backlog Elimination Drive! The goal of this drive is to eliminate the backlog of unreviewed articles. The drive is running from October 22, 2012 – November 21, 2012.

Awards will be given out for all reviewers participating in the drive in the form of barnstars at the end of the drive. There is a backlog of over 1000 articles, so start reviewing articles! Visit the drive's page and help out! EdwardsBot (talk) 00:15, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

Need help in revising/improving an article
Hi,

The article: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia_talk:Articles_for_creation/Imexco_General_Ltd. was declined on 21 October 2012.

It is written: "What you can do:" Add citations to secondary reliable sources that are entirely independent of the subject. Find sources: "Imexco General Ltd." – news · books · scholar · JSTOR · free images.

By entering "Imexco General" in Google, there are about 1200 entries, about half of them are relevant links. There are 4 books published by imexco.

In addition, there are many verifiable and reliable independent sources in the the article itself.

Please help to understand the missing info needed for acceptance.

Thanks Yesikan (talk) 13:09, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

Rudy A. Mazzocchi
Hi Susan,

I am the Executive Administrator of ELENZA who submitted the information regarding Rudy Mazzocchi, (serial entrepreneur, author, venture capitalist, angel investor, etc) that you seemed to have "declined" for an unclear reason. He personally did not prepare the Wikipedia page, but he asked that I use his account information so that he could monitor any edits and changes. Is this the problem?

He is extremely well-known in this industry and recipient of several international business and writing awards.

Thanks you in advance for your reply (and correction of this matter),

(Rudy A. Mazzocchi (talk) 13:41, 22 October 2012 (UTC))

When is the right moment to involve peers in an article review
Susan, I have written an initial version of the article Wikipedia talk:Articles for creation/Heterogeneous Missions Accessibility I would like to involve colleagues from other institutions in the editing. Can I involve them at this stage as the article is not yet approved? Thank you in advance for your help! Pgmarchetti (talk) 15:48, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

Snowysusan-- I need some help, and you are someone that seems to be helpful. I was accused of sock-puppetry and have been banned indefinitely; this accusation is not true, but explanations do not seem to matter. While I can understand the group's intentions, I am attached to an action that is not true. My question or request for help centers around an article that I created in my Sandbox. I would like to finish off this project, which I think is adequately sourced. Is there a way for me to post the information on John F. Kimmons in my current status? Thanks for the help. Perkins FC2 — Preceding unsigned comment added by 147.217.190.161 (talk) 21:33, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

Several questions
I am a little confused about how, if I post something on a listing I should put my name or were

I am also wonder what or how social medial should be listed. That is for example, for Dan Dickerson I know he has a twitter account (@Dan_Dickerson ) is that a new category? should it be in the reference area?

Thanks --- in the mean time I will investigate inf on your page

TitusTiger (talk) 21:53, 22 October 2012 (UTC)TitusTiger

Bio for my boss
Hi Susan, thanks for the welcome. My boss wants me to get another lawyer from our firm a bio on Wikipedia as similar to his as possible. I've copied every bit of formatting and referencing possible from his page onto the new attorney's and nothing I do will get the page accepted and searchable. I've reviewed the help sections countless times as well. What more can I do to get this thing published? Thanks, Marissa — Preceding unsigned comment added by Marissa Marinello (talk • contribs) 22:56, 22 October 2012 (UTC)

S_h_Hoffmann - Conrad Hoffmann, Jr. Article
Hi Snowysusan I am a nebbie. I was trying to create an article based on my master's thesis topic. I am not sure if I should have somehow signed the article or if It is just in a hold until further review. Any suggestions or advice would be most welcome. Thanks for your help.

S h hoffmann (talk) 02:43, 23 October 2012 (UTC)

Hi Snowysusan Thank you for your response and advice. I did follow up and added some more content. I hope to develop the topic of WWI POW aid more fully. I am just trying to find my way here. No need to reply but thanks for your time and consideration! Best wishes, S h hoffmann (talk) 02:25, 25 October 2012 (UTC)

Need help in revising/improving an article(2)
Dear Susan,

"I apologize for not responding to your note sooner." Don't worry...I thank you for your review and comments. 1. "...You have only cited two sources - one showing that the product has FDA approval which does not establish that it is notable, just legal and the other is the company's own website which is neither independent of your subject nor deemed to be reliable."

In the medical business, FDA approval is far from being "only legal". Such an approval is given to companies that proved the safety, effectiveness and clinical usage of the product using the technology. The unique about this company and similar companies which are in Wikipedia, is the novel technologies they use.

2. "You must find articles, newspapers, magazines, scholarly articles, peer reviews, etc., showing that your subject has received significant consideration by reliable third party sources."

As I have indicated, there are many such articles in the internet written by independent and reliable sources.

I will take your comments into consideration, add more references and submit it again for review.

Thanks

Yesikan (talk) 07:13, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

About Yuval Avital article for creation
Dear Snowysusan,

once again I reviewed the article about Yuval Avital, took away any non-encyclopedic note and cut it shorter. All the subjects in this text are referenced. However it seems that you are still annoyed by the length of this article. If you wish to take a position not of a reviewer but of an editor, please tell me in your opinion which is the correct number of characters in which Avital's article should be limited, and I will cut it shorter.

Best Regards

RaffaeleBellan (talk)Raffaele Bellan —Preceding undated comment added 10:53, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the warm welcome Susan
Hi Susan, just wanted to thank you for welcoming me to wiki. I look forward to your feedback and reviewing your work. Regards, SavageHennry (talk) 13:47, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

Hi Susan. Many thanks for the lovely welcome. Polimac (talk) 09:48, 25 October 2012 (UTC)

Imexco General - Revised
Hi Susan,

As per your recommendations I have revised the article, added 5 more references in addition to the previous 2. In addition, there are 17 External Links (some maybe used as reference as well)

Now I am confused as Matthew rejected the old version and not the new one. "This appears to be a duplicate of another submission, Imexco General Ltd., which is also waiting to be reviewed. To save time we will consider the other submission and not this one."

Please help Thanks Yesikan (talk) 18:15, 24 October 2012 (UTC)

Thanks Susan
Thanks for stopping by and editing! Your suggestions on the DAPCU article are welcome HFHVB (talk) 09:31, 25 October 2012 (UTC)

HI: Need help with article
Hi, you edited my article and asked for references. I did as you requested. This morning I received an email from another reviewer, who said my article still needed revision but he didnt tell me what he wanted revised. Instead it still says my article is pending review. Can you help. Thanks, steven.

Stevenbdamelin (talk) 13:15, 25 October 2012 (UTC)

Thank you Susan
Dmthmpsn (talk) 14:14, 25 October 2012 (UTC)dmthmpsn When will I know whether the article I submitted will be approved?

Hi Susan,

I'm the executive producer of a sports talk radio show called The Amigo and Dizz show and I am trying to get our show listed on Wikipedia but apparently my listing is not adequately supported by reliable sources. How can I best remedy this situation? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Djmarkgallo (talk • contribs) 20:34, 25 October 2012 (UTC)

dear susan--thanks for your help with the steven damelin article
dear susan--thanks so much for your help with the steven damelin article.

The article looks really great now.

Ive gone through all the references and everything is now ok. Regarding reference 8, if you click on the link that was there: http://www.ima.umn.edu/new-directions/#Past what you need to do is actually scroll down to "current and past new direction professors". That then verifies that damelin was a new directions professor. This is a very competitive award.

Actually the link does also indeed mention that he attended a two week workshop at the IMA but this relates to other work. The reason they put that statement there was because of a book damelin wrote on signal processing also mentioned in this present article which arose from that workshop. Given damelin was a new directions professor they are reporting back on significant achievements of their IMA new directions professors as well.

In one of the links to George Andrews at Penn State, a ~ was missing. Also the word "distingushed" still appears in one place under Committee of Committees so I removed it.

Every reference which is there now is supported by a reliable source, Ive checked the english, typos.

Please let me know if there is anything else you need.

Hope to hear from you re its status.

<<I am about to check your sources and get back to you because I have a feeling they need work as well. I <<hope this is helpful and I will get back to you. Best Regards, Snowysusan (talk) 14:09, 25 October 2012 <<(UTC)

<<I have now had a look at your references and would ask you to please review them carefully. In one <<instance you use a reference (#8) to support the assertion that Damelin either held a teaching or <<research position at the University of Minnesota. However, when I click on the link to the reference, it <<takes me a site where the only reference to Damelin are his comments about a short two week course he <<took at the Institute for Mathematics and Its Applications. Taking a two week course at an Institution <<does not make one either a teacher or a researcher there. Again, you need to be very careful not to <<exaggerate or mis-state any facts and make sure your references actually support what is written in your <<article. Please review them and remove any that don't actually support what you claim in your article <<and/or remove the claim if it cannot be support by an independent reliable source.

dear susan--thanks so much for your help with the steven damelin article.
dear susan--thanks so much for your help with the steven damelin article.

The article looks really great now.

Ive gone through all the references and everything is now ok. Regarding reference 8, if you click on the link that was there: http://www.ima.umn.edu/new-directions/#Past what you need to do is actually scroll down to "current and past new direction professors". That then verifies that damelin was a new directions professor. This is a very competitive award.

Actually the link does also indeed mention that he attended a two week workshop at the IMA but this relates to other work. The reason they put that statement there was because of a book damelin wrote on signal processing also mentioned in this present article which arose from that workshop. Given damelin was a new directions professor they are reporting back on significant achievements of their IMA new directions professors as well.

In one of the links to George Andrews at Penn State, a ~ was missing. Also the word "distingushed" still appears in one place under Committee of Committees so I removed it.

Every reference which is there now is supported by a reliable source, Ive checked the english, typos.

Please let me know if there is anything else you need.

Hope to hear from you re its status.

174.109.36.82 (talk) 02:43, 26 October 2012 (UTC)

<<I am about to check your sources and get back to you because I have a feeling they need work as well. I <<hope this is helpful and I will get back to you. Best Regards, Snowysusan (talk) 14:09, 25 October 2012 <<(UTC)

<<I have now had a look at your references and would ask you to please review them carefully. In one <<instance you use a reference (#8) to support the assertion that Damelin either held a teaching or <<research position at the University of Minnesota. However, when I click on the link to the reference, it <<takes me a site where the only reference to Damelin are his comments about a short two week course he <<took at the Institute for Mathematics and Its Applications. Taking a two week course at an Institution <<does not make one either a teacher or a researcher there. Again, you need to be very careful not to <<exaggerate or mis-state any facts and make sure your references actually support what is written in your <<article. Please review them and remove any that don't actually support what you claim in your article <<and/or remove the claim if it cannot be support by an independent reliable source.

Bernard Hesling
Snowsusan, re your message about proposed article. The first para of article follows Dictionary of Australian Artists Online article because I wrote the DAAO article but it became too long for them, that's why I decided Wikipedia article would be better. Mincht — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mincht (talk • contribs) 05:52, 26 October 2012 (UTC)

Snowysusan, Re your queries about my DAAO article on Bernard Hesling. The original DAAO article was written by Joan Kerr in 1996 but it was brief, incomplete and incorrect. Joan Kerr died in 2004. As second contributor I replaced her article with mine last year. The third contributor to the article was 'fishel', the DAAO website administrator, whose contribution was to delete my para numbers and delete 'OAM' after Hesling. 'fishel' said that my article was good but too long for DAAO (which is a dictionary, not an encyclopedia). So I shortened it and am trying Wikipedia. I have now shortened and changed my DAAO article again to make the two articles more dissimilar. regards, Tony Minchin — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mincht (talk • contribs) 07:19, 28 October 2012 (UTC)

Dear Susan--did you have a chance to look at the revision --steve damelin
Dear Susan--did you have a chance to look at the revision - thanks so much for your help--let me know if you require anything else -steve damelin — Preceding unsigned comment added by 72.243.131.132 (talk) 18:51, 26 October 2012 (UTC)

Neohumanism Review
Hi,

Thank you for your review, but I believe that there is some misunderstanding here. You wrote: "Thank you for your submission, but the subject of this article already exists in Wikipedia. You can find it and improve it at New Humanism instead." Unfortunately, the article, New Humanism, is not the subject on which I am writing. There have been many persons whose writings have been described as "neohumanism", but a Wikipedia search for "neohumanism" directs you to: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Neohumanism#Neohumanism. That is just a single paragraph in a much larger article about Prabhat Ranjan Sarkar.

If you examine the article on Prabhat Ranjan Sarkar, you will see that there are several sections that point to a "Main article". It is my opinion that the short paragraph on Neohumanism is good, but it does not do justice to the subject. Hence, a larger "main article" is required. Once the article I have written is accepted, I would then request assistance in creating a redirect of the Neohumanism link on Wikipedia to that main article, which greatly amplifies what is currently given.

Please reconsider your evaluation of my submission on this basis. --Abhidevananda (talk) 11:07, 27 October 2012 (UTC)

Francisco Mora Bio
10/27/12

Dear Susan, I am responding to your rejection of the Francisco Mora Biography.... What type of references do you need? I have known Mr. Mora for over 25 years, personally met his parents and family, as well as knowing his musical mentors and associates... Also, since Mr. Mora Catlett is not as well-known as Wynton Marsalis or Max roach, there is not a lot written about him.Since I am a newcomer to Wkipedia, i want to know how to do this correctly.

Sbryant415 (talk) 16:27, 27 October 2012 (UTC)Steve BryantSbryant415 (talk) 16:27, 27 October 2012 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sbryant415 (talk • contribs) 16:12, 27 October 2012 (UTC)