User talk:SocksOfDeath/sandbox

Yay! ♥ Isamouse79 (talk) 16:14, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Good work! We can add this to our "Professional Life" section. I would just make sure that you capitalize "Malta," and "Royal Army Medical Corps." Also maybe answer: Where is the Saint Andrews Military Hospital? (either add ", in ____" or link it to its related Wikipedia article). I wrote about Gould-Bell's son and his death, so your last sentence can be omitted once we put everything together. I'm excited to keep working on this! -♥ Isamouse79 (talk) 19:58, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

Great job! I agree with Izzy that you could add in where Saint Andrews Military Hospital is! Also, maybe add some citations and possibly link some things you talk about, like Saint Andrews Military Hospital, if they have Wikipedia pages! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 128.164.227.84 (talk) 13:24, 1 April 2019 (UTC)

You can add some citations in the end and also add some hyperlinks to some specific words that people generally don't know.Koko413 (talk) 15:56, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

This is very fact driven and I like the simple language and sentence structure. I definitely think you could expand a little bit more/ go more in depth. In addition, I think adding citations and maybe adding some internal links will help strengthen the paragraph. Also, make sure to add the link to your original article in the sandbox. Isabelleshegog (talk) 16:00, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Isabelle

Just like you said, you can add some citation on her education and more information on how she get into the program. Also, hyperlinks would help others to know some unfamiliar names.ChristalCao (talk) 16:14, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Very interesting topic and I really like the subsections and headings that you used to organize your page. You were very specific and it made it easy for me to follow! One suggestion I have is maybe including some hyperlinks to some specific words and maybe including an image! Otherwise, good job! Fariha34 (talk) 16:17, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Good job! It is a very fact-driven sandbox, which I think is the exact thing we are looking for in this class. As you said, you need to add citations and decide or not if you will stay with the topic "legacy". If you do, you need to expand more of this idea. And on the first paragraph, I didn't understand why "Leuitenant Hugh Bell Fisher. He died during the battle of Passchendaele" is in bold. If there is a Wikipedia page talking about Leuitenant Hugh Bell Fisher you should add the hyperlink into the sandbox. Rafamatalon1234 (talk) 16:17, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I think it is a great information. This passage does pretty well in showing the fact. That is part I really appreciated. Samuelzhao000005 (talk) 16:21, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Samuelzhao000005

Really good information and facts but maybe you want to make it flow a little better by expanding on certain sentences. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Wohlina (talk • contribs) 16:23, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

This was an insightful passage to the medical industry in the 1800s. I would like to see more information added to each sub-section and please include sources ASAPCharlier118 (talk) 16:25, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

--Jasonkung22 (talk) 16:30, 3 April 2019 (UTC) This article could use some more info but I am sure that you already know that. Keep up the good work!--Jasonkung22 (talk) 16:30, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Jasonkung22 Good job using neutral language. It is easy to follow. I would add more information on her professional life and her accomplishments.Lorenaramirezl (talk) 00:59, 6 April 2019 (UTC)

Great job! Try to add some links! Sydneycurrie5 (talk) 20:33, 7 April 2019 (UTC)