User talk:SofiaNajera4/User:Bdivito10/sandbox/Ssasad4 Peer Review


 * 1) First of all, there was a ton of information and I did genuinely feel like I learned a lot. You guys also had a lot of different sources to support each sentence and I liked the variety. The spacing of the Events section made it easier to read.
 * 2) The Chicago section had a few run on sentences that disrupted the flow of the section. It made the section feel bulky and sometimes hard to follow along. Some minor grammatical errors in both sections as well but those should be easy to fix. As for editing down the clunky feeling of "Chicago" I would suggest condensing the sentence or maybe adding a paragraph break.
 * 3) The most important thing you guys can do is condensing the sentences so that it is easier to read. There is a bulk of information that I think if better formatted -via sentence structure-the reader will be able to follow along easier.
 * 4) I was really impressed with your groups references. I think we would benefit from diversifying our sources for our own article.

Ssasad4 (talk) 17:12, 9 November 2019 (UTC) Ssasad4 (talk) 17:12, 9 November 2019 (UTC)