User talk:Sograves/sandbox

=Seville Evaluations (1st Edit)=

4/22/2019 Evaluation by user: Siarra Nielsen
Siarra360 (talk) 21:31, 22 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Points: 38/40
 * Grade: 95% Add your third and final citation, maybe an extra for more credit.

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Standards

Language
Exceeds Standards

Organization
Exceeds Standards

Coding
Exceeds Standards

Validity
Exceeds Standards

Completion
Nearly Meets Standard Missing the required third source.

Relevance
Exceeds Standards You seem very knowledgeable.

4/23/19 Evaluation by Swiftkick98
Swiftkick98 (talk) 20:15, 23 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Points: 38.5/40
 * Grade: 96%

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Standard Your edits are grammatically sound, as are the small changes you made to the surrounding paragraph!

Language
Meets Standard Your language is elevated but concise.

Organization
Exceeds Standard The added edits help with the overarching flow of your paragraphs on the Seville page.

Coding
Perfect I'll admit that I'm not an expert at coding, but your page doesn't seem to have any errors!

Validity
Exceeds Standard Your edits have citations to credible sources, good work.

Completion
Nearly Meets Standard Apart from you missing a third source to meet the course requirement for this assignment, you seem to have all the components

Relevance
Exceeds Standard The information you added for this Wiki page on Seville seems entirely relevant to the corresponding headers.

5/7/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 14:57, 7 May 2019 (UTC)


 * Points: 40.5/40
 * Grade: 101.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.

Language
Meets standard.

Organization
Meets standard. Very well integrated with existing material!

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Meets standard.

Relevance
Meets standard.

5/17/19 Evaluation by Swiftkick98

 * Points: 31/40
 * Grade: 77.5

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets Standard All your spelling and grammar is good, there are some punctuations I would change : In the first paragraph where you use a semi-colon, I think you can just make that a separate sentence.

Language
Meets Standard Your language sounds like an encyclopedia, I think you've mastered that tone.

Organization
Meets Standard The flow of your two paragraphs are good, starting with the upward shift in the economy and explaining that and then using the second paragraph to talk about the switch in economy today.

Coding
Nearly Meets Standard Everything looks good !

Validity
Meets Standard All your sources are well cited and seem credible

Completion
 Does not meet standard I know you mentioned this in your post with the link, but you are still missing two sources for this edit. Additionally, in the first paragraph, you mention that Turin SERVED as the headquarters to Fiat but then don't mention when that stopped being a thing or where the headquarters are now. Just a thought

Relevance
Meets Standard The information you added for this Wiki page on Turin's economy seems entirely relevant and so much better than what was there before.

5/18/19 Evaluation by Siarra360
Siarra360 (talk) 03:52, 18 May 2019 (UTC)
 * Points: 34.5 /40
 * Grade: 86%

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Standards You spell everything right. When you write complex sentences with challenging words you still get it right; as an example you write well from the start at, Turin developed as a Fordist city in the early twentieth century, which meant a shift from a service-based economy to an industry-based one.

Language
Meets Standards Way to write like an encyclopedia. You have the tone down but I would recommend writing percent instead of using the % symbol. I took journalism classes and that was the standard I learned in college.

Organization
Exceeds Standards Great job structuring your article. I like when you use semi-colons in your writing; combining ideas within one sentence can show complex understanding.

Coding
Meets Standards Your coding seems properly formatted.

Validity
Exceeds Standards I believe your information is good to know.

Completion
Nearly Meets Standard Missing the required ninth and tenth sources. I would like to see added citations to stand alone sentences such as, Turin accounts for 8% of Italy's GDP. This sentence is not cited and that should be addressed.

Relevance
Meets Standards You seem very knowledgeable. I'd like to see even more new information. Try adding two additional sentences of your own information.

6/6/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 22:41, 6 June 2019 (UTC)

I see you've already put these edits up on live Wikipedia. Great job. Now, could you make a few amendments? See suggestions below.
 * Points: 36.5/40
 * Grade: 91.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.
 * You write "...Turin's economy relied heavily...", and "the city still relies heavily". Therefore the first statement should not be in the past tense, since it is still true. Use the present perfect instead. "...Turin's economy has relied heavily..."

Language
Meets standard.
 * When providing a term in another language, put that term in italics between the parentheses. "...to Fiat (Fabbrica Italiana Automobili Torino; Turin Italian Automobiles Factory)." Yes, I know that was the editor before you.
 * "...shifting more towards..." replace with 'back', since you already identified that it had previously gone from service to manufacturing.

Organization
Meets standard.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Meets standard.
 * "The city served as the headquarters..." It still does. It is just the daughter company of Fiat Chrysler, which is indeed headquartered in London.

Completion
Nearly meets standard. It's a little on the thin side, especially with only 9 references.

Relevance
Meets standard.