User talk:Solojake.js/Marcos Chin/Bibliography

Hi! I think your work could be improved by writing in a more fact-based/ statement voice. I feel like there was some language in the writing that felt less like facts and more subjective. Ex- "felt miserable", "in a moment of rebellion", "it’s paid off with his vast and rich portfolio." I think changing some of the language could really help. Groovym (talk) 21:45, 9 February 2022 (UTC) Maya Montes