User talk:Sonam jindal/sandbox

Here are the notes from my peer review! I didn't want to try to edit your sandbox. I'll bold things that should be changed.

Mithridates had brought together physicians, scientists, and shamans to concoct a potions that would make him immune to poisons. --> change this to potion

Following his death, the Romans became keen on further developing the Mithridates’s potion’s recipe --> don't need the apostrophe

regulation.Additionally --> add a space

Additionally, the creation of these concoctions took on ritualistic form and were often created in public and the process was observed and recorded. --> noun is creation so should be was. Perhaps change sentence to -> Additionally, the creation of these concoctions took on a ritualistic form; they were often created in public where the process was observed and recorded.

Side note: just go through the whole article and check for spaces after periods because there are a few missing. Obviously not a big deal but should be done at some point.

I think content and ordering is fine.

Good job!

Peer Review This is very informative! The information is focused, relevant, and neutral. I would reword the second to last sentence in the first paragraph to make it more clear, and add a link to the wiki page for Johns Hopkins. Whitneygeorge (talk) 02:14, 9 June 2017 (UTC)