User talk:Sophia.colosi/sandbox

Vishal's Peer-Review
[A lead section that is easy to understand] The lead section for the draft article on Ilia Fehrer was able to effectively summarize who Fehrer was, what her accomplishments and career goals were, and essentially why she was important. Maybe if she has anything else that she has done or something to describe who she is, you could probably add that onto the lead.

[A clear structure] The sections of this draft were chronological and easy to understand. The transitions from the lead into her early life, and then her accomplishments did not hinder comprehension of the article. The transition from her legacy in her town onto her death was also an effective way to end the article.

[Balanced coverage] You were able to explain a good amount of detail concerning her personal life, and then her various accomplishments on protecting certain lands. Some information that could be included more if you can find these sources is anything she specifically did in the organization that she helped found.

[Neutral Content] For the most part, the article did not have any strong biases. The only part that would bring about a little concern would be the inclusion of the sentence, "The island was a favorite spot to many locals and urban development would have displaced not only the locals, but many species of plants and animals." Instead, I think you should say that's what Fehrer believed was true, to ensure that no one could accuse the article of bias.

[Reliable Sources] The draft article is good on this part, with almost all of the information that was presented being cited from journals and even a newspaper article.

Vmalla3 (talk) 18:09, 11 July 2019 (UTC)

Jayjay's Peer Review
The Article header is very concise which is good. The first Mention of Fehrer should be bolded though. Also in her life and career, you mention only two of the three projects you introduced in the header. I'm assuming you'll add more about the Pocomoke Riveroff to the section. The article stays very focused to the topic of Ilia Fehrer. The details are presented very well. I feel that the Career and impact section might benefit from a few dates to provide more chronological context to the storyline. Your article is at a very neutral standpoint which is good. You present the facts very neatly and without obstruction. All the links to the sources work, and the original sources appear to be reliable. I would add more information to your later life section, but apart from that, the article seems well put together. Great work!! Jayjay Ugbe (talk) 17:50, 15 July 2019 (UTC)