User talk:SophiaOtto9

SophiaOtto9, you are invited on a Wikipedia Adventure!
 The Adventure

A cheeseburger for you!
Hi Sophia- I look forward to working with you!

Hello from Dr. V
Hi - I got a chance to review your work. Remember that it often takes a few minutes or more for updates to appear. I saw all the updates to your User Page, your introduction to Hannah M, your training completion, and your edit to the emerging adulthood page.
 * Of your ideas, I like the plan to do a "Youth in country" article the best. The "Adolescence" edits you suggest seem to have a U.S. perspective.  You might be able to check out related topics such as Juvenile court and Youth rights (which is tagged for our class).  Foster care is already a well-developed article and might not be a great choice.  More ideas are on this page..
 * Your emerging adulthood edit was a well chosen quote. However, you needed to add the citation using a ref name reference instead of writing the reference again.  I fixed this for you and your classmates. Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 03:21, 14 September 2015 (UTC)

Article Ideas
Hi Sophia! I think it would be interesting if you added the sociology of the juvenile court system to the Adolescent article, especially because you're a LPS major. However, I think since talking to you in class the best article to work on would be Youth in Rwanda, especially since we have an article coming up about African youth that has a section of Rwanda!

I wish you luck in your article search.

Hannah.Mezei (talk) 01:50, 18 September 2015 (UTC)

Topic Feedback
Hi SohiaOtto9! It sounds like you could provide a really interesting perspective to the Adolescence Law page. I think your other topic ideas are also interesting. More specifically I'm interested in how you could incorporate marginalized youth in those countries, seeing that those are primarily post industrialized nations. I know that Sweden is very progressive in most aspects, I bet there are many legal documents regarding youth policies. I'm looking forward to reading what you end up working on! Brogers0922 (talk) 15:49, 18 September 2015 (UTC)Brogers0922

Hey Sophia! I think work on the Adolescent Law article would be great. I am particularly intrigued with the foster care system and its inner workings. I feel like not many adolescents know their legal rights, so it could be cool to look into that as well. I look forward to reading more :) Beckalinageorge (talk) 18:09, 18 September 2015 (UTC)

Topic Feedback
Hi Sophia!

I think your topic on youth in a different country would be really cool. I am planning on doing the same thing based on where I went abroad, and it would be super interesting to compare the two areas. I'm sure the Dominican Republic would be insanely different than a country in Europe. I'm excited to see your finished product!

WagenerLaura (talk) 14:47, 19 September 2015 (UTC)

Your proposal
Hi, SophiaOtto9- I commend you for your careful review of already existing sources. I also like your consideration of a lead paragraph. As you write your page, you can link to these articles and link to your article in strategic places around Wikipedia. I would be curious whether you can find specific information on youth and religions or youth culture in SA. Also, have you found articles to explain why Saudi youth are (I think) less politically active than youth in other parts of the Arab world?

Your next step is to work to structure a page like the others in our "Youth in" series. I encourage you to look beyond Youth in the Arab World. What ideas for research and writing do you have given your observations of other "Youth in" pages from our course? Look at, for example Youth in South Africa and Youth in Nigeria.

I do not yet have a sense of sources you have found on the topic from scholarly sources. I look forward to reading the bibliography. As you post sources, please write a bit about what each source says and how it contributes to your potential revisions. What do you have, and what are you still looking for? Ideally, you could also inform a reader how the sources you end up with will shape the revision plans you mention in your proposal. Cheers, Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 03:37, 5 October 2015 (UTC)

Feedback on sources
I echo Kayla's assessment. You did a great job on this assignment! You're ready to draft your article. As you write, you will probably look for additional sources (some of which I mention here). You can create a checklist of items to find information about, some of which you're done with: family structure, health, crime, and educational attainment. I like your incorporation of religion and politics. The next steps are: Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 19:15, 20 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Looking at the Saudi government's, UNICEF's and other global data sources to find basic statistics on youth
 * Locating doi numbers for all sources
 * Creating a reference page and correct formatting of references in your sandbox
 * Writing your first draft. I would love for you to get to as close to 2000 words as possible in your first draft, as you are already well on your way.

Reference errors on 8 December
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