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"Article Evaluation"
Clothing industry This wiki page gives a brief overview of what goes the clothing or garment industry is all about. The article focuses on the actual  clothing industry but discusses the other industries it is tied to which includes the textile industry, fashion industry, fashion retailers and second hand industry. The article lacks details about these other industries it touches but gives the reader ample information on what the terminology is, where it is founded and production. There is no history section in the article but in the terminology gives information on the industry known as sweat shops in the early 20th century. The article is neutral. It discusses the economic benefits of the clothing industry but it also brings up the problems with working conditions associated with the clothing and fashion industry. Since there both of these conditions are brought up it makes the article neutral and strictly states the information. This information provided for the clothing industry gives a very condensed but helpful to a reader interested in the clothing and garment industry. If a reader if is trying to find more in-depth information they may have to look for other sources outside of this page. The reader can learn about industries that effect this one by clicking and reading the wiki links provided such as the fashion industry, retail industry or the textile industry.

Unit 2 Peer Review
The plan for improving the article looks good and complete. The introduction addition of the draft is a great complement to what's already written in the article, as adding the environmental impacts is necessary to have a better overview of the topic. The H&M is example is a good addition to the article as it gives better understanding of the topic and help readers see how this is impacting the real world. The language used is neutral and unbiased. The sources look good and reliable. I think you should keep working on adding the other sections you mentioned in your plan as it makes the article more complete and up to date. Adding the consumer section and updating the future outlook with examples from recent years will make the article more developed, as learning what the consumer do post purchase is key to have a better grasp of the topic, as well as learning how sustainable fashion will be managed in the future. Danielazea (talk) 19:40, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

Rachel Lee's Peer Review
'''Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?'''

Everything in the article is relevant to the article topic. I liked how you included links to other Wikipages. Could you include a little bit in the introduction on how exactly the industry has cause irreversible damage to the environment?

'''Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?'''

I think that some sentences seem a little biased, such as "Fashion retailers have new social responsibility to lower the horrible impact it is currently making." Although I agree with this statement, others may not. Some people may not be on board with the sustainability agenda. I would perhaps include some information of how companies who have not adopted sustainability practices have defended their practices and why they choose not to practice sustainability.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

See above comment.

'''Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?'''

Yes, all of the links work and support the claims in the article.

'''Is each fact supported by an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?'''

Each fact is supported by a citation. The information comes from a variety of sources, including magazine publications and journal sources. Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that should be added? The information seems up to date. It looks like in the outline, you mention adding a section about future outlook. I think that will be very helpful and improve the existing article.

Rachelhannahlee (talk) 23:52, 1 March 2018 (UTC)