User talk:Southesm/New sandbox

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The introductory is straightforward and to the point of what you are talking about. However, it needs summary of everything you will be talking about. This includes all of the subjections that you have in your contents page so far. You cited all of what you used from the sources very nicely. You do need to add more information to the subsections that you have, just to make sure the article has as much information that you can give and people can learn new information. Throughout your entire article, the tone is neutral, which is very important. Alaina.parrish (talk) 22:38, 23 October 2018 (UTC)

Emma Nurre Peer Feedback 2
Sarah, your draft looks great! I would suggest to add more images and media if possible and hyperlink your work to other wikipedia pages (you know, like the internal wiki pages). I like how you laid out your article by sections. Your sources are cited well and you write very neutrally with a clear tone and purpose.

I would recommend modeling your sections after a feature article such as planned parenthood itself or another institutions page and adopt their layout. This will help you cover a variety of topics and make your article more well rounded. I think you have great subtopics within your article but they need to be more thorough. Nurreea (talk) 13:18, 24 October 2018 (UTC)