User talk:Spencer Kendall/sandbox

Tone
Your tone is more similar to an essay than an encyclopedia material Please look at the tone page and revise some of your wording. Also you are writing includes more about fermentation than yeast. Look at what is in the fermentation section already and try and change your focus your writing. You also need to cite you statements, Look here. Bryantlib (talk) 17:42, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Content
Comments fromnstructor: You need to cite your statements! Please coordinate with your group (Ava), since some information is repetitive. You should each have your own paragraph covering different aspects of the topic.

Explain what you mean by ‘natural’ yeast. All yeast are natural, whether you inoculate a commercial strain or not. Look up ‘autochthonous’- might be a better term, but you’d need to define it, too.

Several yeast strains are used in cider fermentation. While fermentation can occur due to natural yeast, cider producers often add additional yeast to acquire a desired taste in the final cider product. Yeast choice in fermentation can make a cider taste fruity, improve character (“improve character” is too non-specific. Clarify your meaning.), regulate alcohol content, and produce aromatic compounds. Further, the fermentation conditions yeast strains are subjected to affect the activity of yeast and the effects yeast has on cider taste (provide examples). Fermentation conditions should align with the yeast strain’s optimal conditions, so fermentation occurs at a desired rate. Incomplete fermentation or over fermentation can leave undesired compounds that taint the final product. These last two sentences need more explanation. I do not agree with the last sentence, as written.Oenotropae (talk) 18:22, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload the same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

PROOFREAD your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :)Bryantlib (talk) 16:03, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Adding information to Cider page
You are inserting information on the Cider page, which is semi-protected. To add your paragraphs to the live page, you will need to have made at least 10 edits. You can do this in several ways; editing in your sandbox or a group member's sandbox, or/and going through and doing the steps in the tutorial all add edits to your username. If you change something and hit 'publish changes' it counts as an edit. The little box called 'Notices' on the top right of all the Wikipedia pages tells you when you have made 10 edits. Bryantlib (talk) 16:03, 7 May 2018 (UTC)