User talk:Sphub/sandbox

The point you added is not in the original article. This is a very good job. However, I think you still have something missing. First of all, in terms of structure, since the original article did not have particularly sufficient content, it would be a little inappropriate if you added an education before the history, so I suggest that you should put education after the history to have a more logical order. Second, in terms of balancing act, the original article lacked a lot of content about disability in Russia. I think there must be a lot of content behind this topic that can be unearthed, so you can help to add more content to enrich the original article. Third, in terms of sources of information, your first reference is not particularly related to the subject, and I suggest that it can be deleted. Finally, I hope my suggestions can help you to complete the article better. Nanhezhu (talk) 01:21, 3 December 2020 (UTC) Nanhezhu (Tom Zhu) (Talk) 20:17 December 2, 2020

All of the information you added to the article was relevant and helpful. I agree with the other student that putting the information about education would flow better if the history was provided first. This would give the reader more background knowledge to really have a grasp on the history when they come to read about the education. The first source in the article was not totally relevant and could be deleted. The only grammatical error I picked up was in the 3rd sentence, however should be lower cased. I think you did a good job showing both sides of the argument so it did not feel biased while reading it. I hope my critiques help you. Emmaboiano (talk) 21:26, 3 December 2020 (UTC)