User talk:SplashierSun/sandbox

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Nice work expanding on the Pyrogeography page, with explicit links to paleoecology. I have some suggested edits:

- Need an apostrophe for "area's" in the first sentence.

- "climactic" should be "climatic."

- I would remove change "pros and cons" to "strengths and limitations," and I would explain what you mean by that. For example, charcoal records can tell us about regional fire signals, but it's difficult to get information about fire intensity or severity. This is a really important point, and I'm glad you made it.

- For "very far back in time," track down references for some of the older charcoal records -- and then be specific. I.e., "very far back in time, to at least the Carboniferous." (I just made that up, but you get the idea.)

- instead of "cores (lake or soil)" I would say "soil or sediment cores from lakes or bogs."

- I would create a subheading for "Charcoal Analysis" to describe the methods, or at least start a new paragraph. Make sure this gets a reference.

- For methods, I would edit to: "Fossil charcoal fragments are isolated from the core with a sieve, after the organic material is bleached so teh dark particles are more visible. Particles are then counted on a plate with a microscope." Or something similar, in your words.

- therefore is misspelled

- High peaks are sometimes interpreted as an intense fire, or a more local fire, but this can be difficult to interpret. This also needs a reference.

- instead of "data mentioned earlier," I would say "other paleoecological proxy data" and link to the proxy page if there is one.

- I would take out the LOI sentence, or edit it to talk about how LOI can be a proxy for terrestrial and aquatic productivity and climate. A cleaner connection is with magnetic susceptibility, which tells us the fraction of magnetic particles in the lake. These are thought to come from terrestrial soils, since no magnetic minerals are made in the lake itself.

- The plural of "proxy" is "proxies."

Let me know if you have questions!

IceAgeDoc (talk) 23:16, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Feedback on Proposed Page
Hello, Team Pyro! This sounds like a solid plan, and you've got a few good references to start with. Just remember to go with primary sources whenever possible (e.g., the original article, rather than a popular article about the science or a review paper). And see if there's anything you can add in terms of photos (maybe take your own picture of charcoal under the microscope?) or other images. The section you're interested in definitely needs some cleaning up and fleshing out, so it's a good one.

The next thing you'll want to do is start drafting the page here in your Sandbox. You can copy and paste the source code from the original page into your Sandbox to play around with your edits. Then, send me an email when you're ready to get some feedback.

IceAgeDoc (talk) 21:41, 23 April 2018 (UTC)