User talk:Srd918/sandbox

Author's note for Amy Richards
For my wikipedia article, I added information, reworded paragraphs that I realized had been plagiarized, and broke the article up into sections.

I think I did a good job of splitting up where the information should go and adding more information.

I am still trying to add more information for the Third Wave section. I am also still working on finding more references. I found information to put in her "Early Life" section but I am not sure that the source is considered reliable yet so I have refrained from including it.

Lead Section

 * I think you did a good job with what you added to the original lead sentence. You added more about what she has done and what her accomplishments are so that the reader can understand why she is important.
 * There was a good amount of information in the summary that previously existed.
 * You did do a great job in going into detail about her career and her role in third wave feminism.
 * I get a good idea of who Amy Richards is and what she actually does.

Article
The article itself is organized well with the use of proper sections. The article was clear and easy to navigate through. I don't think there is a section that I would say that you should take out, I think all of the divided sections that you went and added come together well and the information is divided appropriately. Your style of writing fits well with the article.

Lead Section
I think that adding that she is a producer is definitely a good idea for the heading because it takes care of the missing points in the article. I would like to see more about her role as a producer in the body of the article because I do not see anything else mentioning that.

Article
I think your organization is great and you did a great job of staying neutral throughout the article. The only thing I would change is instead of saying "she" at the start of most sentences maybe find a way of restructuring some sentences or replacing she with her name.

Peer Review- Samantha
Lead Section
 * I like how you added the first sentence to the lead section to make it more clear
 * the summary is clear and shows what will be said later on in the article

Article
 * content- the content is good and I don't get the feeling it is biased toward one side
 * I like what you added because it gives the article more detail

Sources- you may want to add some more sources so you get multiple points of view — Preceding unsigned comment added by 138.237.13.174 (talk) 17:07, 18 April 2018 (UTC)