User talk:Srobinson00/sandbox

- The first sentence seems like it could be broken down into two smaller sentences.

- It would give really strong backing if you used statistical data when referring to increased incidences of drug you. eg. How is the percentage of Heroin users increased from previously years? With that little extra bit of information, it would really beef up the relaying data by giving evidence of such increases.

- you say this, "United States are predominantly white, suburban men and women in their early twenties", but never reference why white suburban men and women in their early 20's correlate to the increased epidemic. I can see how you may be trying to link it to this, "... general public, medical practitioners, and the pharmaceutical industry; affluent individuals who living in the suburbs often have an increased means of obtaining otherwise expensive and potent drugs such as opioids and narcotics through valid prescriptions", but needs to be more specific not generalized if this is what you were trying to link it to.

- This is a overall very strong and has a good backbone with a lot of information. Just make sure your points are well connected to one another and be specific about data and what you're referencing otherwise very good read!

(K.Maurer (talk) 00:29, 2 April 2018 (UTC))

Review
Srobinson00 awesome addition to the article of Suburbanization on the subject of drug abuse. It is a correlation I wouldn’t have made on my own. However after reading your section it made me aware of this issue. You provided a lot of useful information and explanations as to what this issue stems from, all from multiple valid sources. I think you can strengthen this section by providing more information in the second paragraph. Include what resources are better equipped with, also including information on a few of the initiatives. Awesome information! Alexander.swanson (talk) 03:36, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

Srobinson00's peer review
I think your addition of drug usage and abuse is good and an interesting outlook on suburbanization. Something that may not only benifit your addition but the entire article, would be to add more values and population comparisons which can paint a more visual picture for the reader, ex; amount of people in X year vs amount of people in Y year, compare different populations in cities across the U.S and world. Adding in those comparable values will create a stronger article just due to the fact that it already has plenty of important information, but being able to back it up with numbers makes a more powerful read. I think the only things the article could use would be a little more information in some sections and numerical values for all sections, and it would then be a overall great article! Great work! Hannahabigail (talk) 03:14, 3 April 2018 (UTC)