User talk:Srp027/sandbox

Writing Overview

 * Style - The information that you have added so far is good. The page focuses on details so the more numbers, the better. Focus on keeping track of what information goes where. There's no point in writing all of this down if you forget what goes where. Here is where bullet points are your friend.
 * Data - It is imperative that your information on these statistics come from reliable sources. Cite them wherever possible. Check said sources by seeing if you can find the same or similar numbers for immigration in more than one place.
 * Citation - It doesn't hurt to begin to cite your work as you write it down. You'll avoid having to type out the whole thing later and you'll have a list of sources that you have already used so you don't forget later.

CourtneyLe&#39;rose (talk) 02:20, 27 March 2019 (UTC) * I like your our outline that you have up my only suggestion would be to make sure that you thoroughly expand on the topics that you can instead of have many different topics. Also try grouping the information that you have posted into groups that are some what similar or verry similar and every now in then add a fun fact of something.CourtneyLe&#39;rose (talk) 02:20, 27 March 2019 (UTC)

Overall Understanding

 * This information is a little hard to understand without the accompanying background. I doubt that what you have written right now is nonsense but each bullet should be its own complete thought in order to stand alone. For example, the second bullet point is "second largest immigrant group in the united states," This is a line that could easily be taken out of context and would lose its meaning.

CourtneyLe&#39;rose (talk) 02:33, 27 March 2019 (UTC)Right under the bullet point in parenthesis at the end of the sentence you should give additional detail on the bulletin point. Like when you stated that between 1920 and 1940 Indians left for India. Why did they leave? Also you should include information some of the thing Indian Americans did to bring a little bit of India here with them. Like what part of their culture did they share with those around them to those who were confused understand the meaning of the way they do the things they do.CourtneyLe&#39;rose (talk) 02:33, 27 March 2019 (UTC)

Possible Changes

 * Think about dividing these bits of information into different/more specific sections. If you're working on a single section, name it in your heading. Don't be afraid to add formatting changes, they'll make the information easier to read.

Student 4923 (talk) 19:40, 26 March 2019 (UTC)