User talk:Stacyjljoseph/sandbox

good writeup. The second sentence can be corrected a little. But there is more to the story that a lot of people don't understand if you can go through all the background of it would be better — Preceding unsigned comment added by AshrabiS (talk • contribs) 01:16, 1 December 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
Sources: One is a little too outdated (usually try to find one published within 5 yrs, that one is over 10 years old), and another is not from a scholarly journal, making it a little less credible than the other two

Content: Although you are very accurate in your depiction of child marriage, I would avoid using words like “stripping” and “pain” because those are powerful words that mean to invoke an emotional reaction. You do not want to convince your audience to feel a certain way; you’re just supposed to provide them with the facts. Also “not addressed enough” is an opinion; you can elaborate to explain why it is not enough with fact-based evidence rather than just stating that it isn’t enough. The last line in the paragraph is a combination of persuasive speech and opinion and should either be reworded or eliminated to present an unbiased, fact-based view. - Mcwallac (talk) 06:23, 6 December 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review:

Content:Overall I liked your content and the direction you were headed in. I would advise to just try not to persuade your audience. There were a couple points you made that you should elaborate on.BigJohn24 (talk) 06:42, 7 December 2018 (UTC)John B.