User talk:Starja8859/Caffeine-induced sleep disorder/Bergumar Peer Review

Hi there,

Overall, I think the information you are presenting in the article is relevant, unbiased, and comes from reputable sources. I think the sentence saying, “there is relatively no association between caffeine and its effects on sleep for infants,” could be made more concise because I wasn’t sure if I should interpret this as caffeine consumed by the mother during pregnancy or caffeine consumption of the infants themselves. The citation placed right after the phrase “most studies now” could be placed at the end of the sentence to show that all of the information you used came from the same source. There were some phrases followed by commas that did not need them. For example, the phrases “most studies now,” “individuals with higher caffeine consumption,” and “those who consumed high amounts of caffeine daily” do not need to be followed by commas. The sentence “In one study which looked at children ages six to ten…” was written a little confusing because of the “and” towards the middle of the sentence. I thought it was a good idea how you linked what half life means so that readers can better understand the information.

Bergumar (talk) 00:06, 19 November 2020 (UTC)