User talk:Stellasuperba/sandbox

Hi Stellasuperba, your draft looks good! The content is quite detailed, well-organized, and is backed up with reliable sources. I really like the section of “Common examples”, which helps me better understand the topic of predatory advertising. Here are a few suggestions and feedbacks I have: 1. It may be helpful to back up your contents with more citations. For example, the article would be more reliable if you cite journal articles for “advertisement of unregulated ‘medical’ devices to those suffering from degenerative or other painful diseases”, as well as “Data Broker Accountability and Transparency Act of 2019”. Also make sure that you use 20+ peer-reviewed article as sources. 2. It would be helpful to keep in mind the readability of your article. For now, the overall draft is not difficult to access but there are some minor places I find a little hard to understand. For example, in the section of “Economic Vulnerability”, I’m not sure what “alternative market transactions” refers to. 3. I’m also a little confused about the difference between “Motivational Vulnerability” and “Emotional Vulnerability” as I think the example of motivational vulnerability can be also applied to emotional vulnerability. It may be helpful to provide an example of emotional vulnerability that can help the audience to distinguish between the two. In general, you have a really nice draft. Good job, and good luck on your final article!