User talk:Stephaniegajdjis/sandbox

BushraSh (talk) 18:18, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Bushra's feedback

I really like the idea of merging our edits for the genre section and think it makes more sense when the two are together. I think all your proposed edits were specific and well cited. Good work! BushraSh (talk) 18:18, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Carlsontemple (talk) 18:38, 27 November 2018 (UTC) The proposed additions to the genre/style section are effective in identifying the source of controversy surrounding the classification of Persepolis. The quote, "As time went on the comics still tended towards the autobiographical, but storytelling gained importance. Most of the women creating comics today are still doing so from a woman's point‐of‐view, but their target audience seems more universal" may be able to be paraphrased to reduce quotation. All of the paraphrasing suggested to replace excessive quotation effectively incorporates the information in an easily readable format. The proposed edits to the character list have cut unnecessary information from the descriptions from the characters. However, I believe that the character list should be edited further to remove whole characters as they do not affect the plot or themes of the novels significantly. Possible characters that could be removed from the Character List: Mehridia, Kia, Siamek and Mohsen, Khosro, Uncle Taher, Mali (Persepolis: The Story of a Childhood), and Zozo, Lucia (Persepolis: The Story of a Return). Carlsontemple (talk) 18:38, 27 November 2018 (UTC)