User talk:Stephanierobo/sandbox

Hi Stephanie,

I believe you may want to shorten your lead paragraph here. The first paragraph which provides the history of the Huambisa language may be a good lead paragraph. Additionally, the second paragraph which describes the grammar of the language is quite wordy. Maybe you could briefly describe what an affricate is? Describe its use in english such as the sound of, "ch" and "j". Similarly, maybe describe the allophone in laymans terms. I believe breaking up the paragraphs into different sections would make things flow a little better while reading it.

Naldy Solano's Peer Review for Stephanie's article
Hi Stephanie!

I like the structure of your formatting so far, it is easy to follow. If you want to make your work longer you could add a couple more sections following the “Wikipedia style: the language template”. For example, your “Linguistic Description” is very detailed but could be broken up into different sections if you wish to expand on your work. The template suggests talking about the Classification, History, and Geographic Distribution in different sections. I did not want to break apart all of your work and confuse you with what you researched so far but rather added in comments throughout your work where I felt you could use certain information to create a new section, and focus more on the topic of your previous sentence.

More into the Geographic distribution you could have 3 sub-sections within that main one, mentioning 1- Official Current Status, 2- Dialects/ Varieties, and 3- Derived Languages. In your lead, you wrote about “Spanish colonizers first generated the name Xívaro in the late 16th century as a way of overgeneralizing several ethnicities of similar sociopolitical statuses within the region and referring to them as savages”. This would be an excellent piece of information for one of these sub-sections where you could discuss the varieties. So far, I learned a lot about the Huambisa Language just by reading your work and can’t want to read your final project! Have a great weekend and I hope my feedback was helpful! Naldysol21 (talk) 16:25, 6 April 2018 (UTC)