User talk:Student Eibmurc

Peer Review of "Gender theories in 'Bright Thursdays' "
This article is well written and has a good organizational structure. The flow of the article is logical and orderly in how the various sub-headings have been arranged. The different concepts were clearly outlined and illustrations were made showing the role they played in the story. What was impressive was the ways in which the article was able to provide readers with a thorough understanding of the role the different themes played in the telling of the story, and so as the reader I felt I understood the story without having yet read it.

Despite the numerous commendations that can be afforded to this article, there are a few changes that can be made in order to further improve it. The first of which is the fact that the story contained contradicting information. The introduction initially stated that the nature of Olive Senior's stories reflected the lives of "children, adolescents, adults and the elderly" and yet the sentence following that, lists these stories as focusing on the "lives of children". The article was inconsistent in the description of Laura's skin colour as sometimes it is stated as being "light" and other times it is described as being "dark". There were also a number of grammatical and spelling errors made in the article that could benefit from editing. For example, in the introductory paragraph patois was spelt as "Patios", "writer" in the background section on Olive Senior needed an 's' in order for it to be grammatically correct, among others.

The writings under the section "Olive Senior", while containing detailed information about her life and the importance of her work, was not arranged chronologically. As such, it listed schooling and other accomplishments before her birth and earlier life. The use of "we" throughout the article should also be omitted, as it takes away from the unbiased and neutral nature of Wiki articles. The writer should therefore utilize a more neutral tone in the article. The article also made references to citations that were not listed in the reference section, for example "Chevannes (2001)" was cited in the article but there was no corresponding reference.

In terms of improvements, an hyperlink could be created for "Jamaican Creole" to provide additional information to readers about the subject matter. More citations could also be added to the sections referencing slavery, as well as the one about caribbean family structures, to offer more credibility. A more scholarly source could be used to define the concepts of "womanhood and "manhood" instead of the Merriam-Webster Dictionary.

Despite the minor changes to be made, the article was clear and the information included was relevant to the different sections outlined. The sources for the most part were reliable and met the standards expected. The lead of the article provided a good foundation for what the article was to be about. The different sections of the article had lengths appropriate to the importance of the article's subject. Overall, this article has met most of the five elements for a good Wikipedia article.

Stephcal (talk) 15:48, 29 March 2021 (UTC)