User talk:Sugaryshae/Writing in childhood

Comments on draft in-progress
Hi Sugaryshae!

You've got some great work started on this article improvement, so kudos for your efforts to keep improving it!

I agree with much of what Anne has said in her review, and I would second her suggestion of beefing up the sourcing for the "Relationship" section - perhaps Gunther Kress' work would be helpful here? In addition, for the "Sensory" section, consider using more links to existing Wikipedia articles for the nouns in this section. As a reminder, to link, simply highlight the word/phrase, click on the link button in the editor, and Wikipedia will create a list of possible links for you.

The topics you've outlined for "Promoting" are especially good, and I look forward to seeing these portions fleshed out with descriptions akin to what you've added under the "inventive spelling" suggestion.

In all, this is sharp, sophisticated work! Keep it up! Pthomas4 (talk) 21:14, 9 November 2023 (UTC)