User talk:Sulfurboy/Archive/2015/July

Jason Adelman - Draft
Good morning Sulfurboy,

re: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jason_Adelman

I submitted a revised edit based on your comments on June 25th about a week ago, hopefully this meets your criteria so we can get it active. Please make note, the owner of the picture of Smirnoff & Adelman that was deleted due to lack of ownership info, emailed wiki providing permission.

Thanks again for your hard work and let me know if I can be of any further assistance getting this active. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Robot19332 (talk • contribs) 14:33, 3 July 2015 (UTC)


 * Reviewed and declined again, read comments and post further issues you have on it on the talk page of the draft as I am watching it. Thanks. Sulfurboy (talk) 15:21, 6 July 2015 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: SleepBot has been accepted
 SleepBot, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created. The article has been assessed as Start-Class, which is recorded on the article's talk page. You may like to take a look at the grading scheme to see how you can improve the article. You are more than welcome to continue making quality contributions to Wikipedia. . Thank you for helping improve Wikipedia! Sulfurboy (talk) 19:40, 6 July 2015 (UTC)
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NEWBIE
Sulfurboy -

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:GTChannel

Thanks for review of Draft: GTChannel. Please excuse - newbie. It was suggested I show notability via significant coverage documentation and other. In writing the article I sourced as much as I could find out there online. Not sure where else to turn to. In digital entertainment I know it is known, but not sure how to show that. This is good fun. I have an idea for page #2 on completely different subject, I just want to get this update under my belt. Hopefully no one beats me to the punch. Rob INTERSTREAMER (talk) 20:58, 6 July 2015 (UTC)(INTERSTREAMER)
 * If there isn't other sources for it, then the article doesn't yet meet the requirements for notability and doesn't belong on Wikipedia. Thanks. Sulfurboy (talk) 21:01, 6 July 2015 (UTC)

Your flag on Code of Tanks page
Regarding: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Code_of_Tanks

Hi. You flagged this page as needing Verification but I'm unsure what's missing or what you feel needs changing. Please let me know your thoughts. Thanks. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cotdev (talk • contribs) 22:01, 6 July 2015 (UTC)


 * Hey, to show notability we need to see some sort of outside sources, such as news or media coverage. Primary sources aren't typically enough to establish notability. Sulfurboy (talk) 22:03, 6 July 2015 (UTC)

23:26:36, 6 July 2015 review of submission by Visitrick
Hi Graham, Regarding an article you declined, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Loandepot, can you provide some feedback on how to make it better? Should it be more conversational and less matter of fact? Are there specific words or references that should be omitted? Thanks for your help. -Rick Visitrick (talk) 23:26, 6 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes, more like a prose style than just listing things off, make sure to establish how the company is notable outside of just being a company WP:ROUTINE. Look to a page like Citibank for an example of how a bank wiki page may be written. Obviously it won't be as extensive as that page, but it'll give you the general idea for layout and tone. Sulfurboy (talk) 23:36, 6 July 2015 (UTC)

SleepBot
Hi Sulfurboy!

I have a question regarding a draft you reviewed. I know that (due to backlogs) you want to spend less time discussing so that you can spend more time reviewing. Still, I do hope that you could visit Draft talk:SleepBot, take a look at my question, and reply there.

Your talk page is fairly busy, and it looks like my last post was auto-archived before you replied. To try to prevent this, I shall bump this thread in advance. The bots will leave it unarchived for 200 days unless you explicitly request archiving. To request archiving, simply remove all of the template code, and comments, between here and the end of this message.

Cheers, —Unforgettableid (talk) 19:37, 6 July 2015 (UTC)


 * I resubmitted and approved it. I did add a citation tag at one spot where confirmation is needed. Sulfurboy (talk) 19:42, 6 July 2015 (UTC)


 * You added a citation needed tag to the end of a paragraph. My source for the second sentence in the paragraph is http://janezhu.com/sleepbot/ but I think it may be better not to link to that source from within the article. The source is on Ms. Zhu's personal website. SleepBot has been downloaded more than a million times. I think Ms. Zhu would prefer not to receive emailed technical support requests from Wikipedia readers. So, that second sentence has a source; it is just not visible to readers. May I therefore please remove your citation needed tag from the third sentence?


 * P.S. Thank you for approving the draft!


 * Cheers, —Unforgettableid (talk) 19:52, 6 July 2015 (UTC)


 * No there needs to be a listed source on that everyone can see. Especially since its a claim about the future of the product. Sulfurboy (talk) 19:56, 6 July 2015 (UTC)


 * SleepBot has been downloaded more than two million times. Do you agree that publicly showing the source might lead to her getting unwanted emails asking for tech support? —Unforgettableid (talk) 20:15, 6 July 2015 (UTC)


 * I can't be a crystal ball and predict things like that. I imagine though that if they made a website with an e-mail on it, then they don't mind getting e-mails to it. Sulfurboy (talk) 20:18, 6 July 2015 (UTC)

That webpage is not part of the SleepBot website, which is a separate website. It's part of Jane Zhu's online portfolio website. She wants people to see the work she's done on SleepBot in order so that they'll offer her jobs. Not in order so that they can email her for free tech support. :)

On the SleepBot website, she doesn't reveal her personal email address at all.

—Unforgettableid (talk) 00:36, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

Mohit mittal
Why did you add maintenance tags to a page that's already tagged for CSD and has no chance of lasting a week? I'm not trying to accuse you of anything, just curious. → Σ σ  ς. (Sigma) 04:45, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Done via AWB, I usually won't skip just because there's a CSD, takes two seconds and doesn't hurt anyone. Surprised you haven't seen this happen more often with AWB users...Sulfurboy (talk) 04:47, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

Draft:George Wickham
Hi, I notice that you've declined my draft article, Draft:George Wickham. Could you please provide me with a more detailed explanation of why you declined it and how I can fix it? --110.20.234.69 (talk) 05:17, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

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Your recent AfC contributions
Hi Sulfurboy, I just wanted to remark on your recent string of AfC reviews. While I am impressed that you have been steadily reviewing drafts for the past six hours, I should mention a few things that other reviewers have noticed, primarily copyvio. In a random sampling of your accepts (two), we came across two pages with copyright violations. Drafts must be checked for CV infractions before they can even be looked at for quality. Please make sure you check this as your first course of business, and flag anything that requires it. If you want to chat more, simply ping me or another AfC reviewer, or stop by IRC. Cheers, Primefac (talk) 21:11, 6 July 2015 (UTC)
 * (looks like and I both decided to leave a message... I blanked mine, but please do take notice) L235 (t / c /  ping in reply ) 21:13, 6 July 2015 (UTC)


 * Also, please do join us on IRC at so that we can discuss quickly. Thanks L235 (t / c /  ping in reply ) 21:13, 6 July 2015 (UTC)
 * A tool used by almost all AfC-reviewers is copyvios developed by The Earwig. There is a userscript located at User:The Earwig/copyvios.js which you can install, if you haven't. Thanks. (t) Josve05a  (c) 21:14, 6 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Awesome, I'll use that tool from now on, thanks. Sulfurboy (talk) 21:15, 6 July 2015 (UTC)


 * Also, when accepting, do make sure to go back and clean up the article. Many of the AfC reviewers tend to spend a few minutes after each accept to clean up the article; gnome it a bit. L235 (t / c / ping in reply ) 21:16, 6 July 2015 (UTC)

User:Sinha ajay/sandbox review (6 Jun)
Just a courtesey note to explain why I removed your assessment of the article. The article was in Hindi, so should have been declined on language grounds, not as a test. A quick google translate reveals that there is text here, not random characters. Rankersbo (talk) 09:15, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

Request on 13:24:49, 7 July 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Sosorrycartoon
Dear Sulfurboy,

I have removed the words that looked like PEACOCK TERMS. Request you to review the article once again please and suggest if any more changes are required.

Sosorrycartoon (talk) 13:24, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

Request on 08:20:41, 7 July 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Kara Moana Healey
Please explain what Ïmproperly sourced means

Stephen R (talk) 08:20, 7 July 2015 (UTC)


 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:The_answer_to_life,_the_universe,_and_everything Sulfurboy (talk) 17:04, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

13:32:25, 7 July 2015 review of submission by Sosorrycartoon
Hi Sulfurboy, I have made the necessary changes and removed the words that appeared as PEACOCK terms to me. Please advise if any more changes are required that may have been missed out by my inadvertently.

Sosorrycartoon (talk) 13:32, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
 * "based on parody of political leaders characterized in an amusing yet subtle manner" is an example of a line that is still problematic. This line either needs to be sourced properly or removed.Sulfurboy (talk) 17:07, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

16:09:45, 7 July 2015 review of submission by Gramiller
Hi Sulfurboy, thanks for your review of https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Children%27s_Health_System_of_Texas. I'm new at this, so I'm unsure about how many sources are needed to be credible. Currently, the page references 7 sources not generated by Children's Health. If that's not enough, then how many more sources does it need? Also, I'm not sure how to make the article more neutral since it's already just stating facts. Again, I'm new so please forgive my ignorance. Gramiller (talk) 16:09, 7 July 2015 (UTC)


 * It's not a matter of a number of sources as it is creating a neutral article. Wikipedia is not just a place to put a business listing. There needs to be neutral encyclopedic content. Such as finding articles that discuss the impact of the hospital in the community, etc. Basically you don't want the article to just look like a press release. Sulfurboy (talk) 17:09, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

18:13:17, 7 July 2015 review of submission by GgEb
Thanks for taking the time to review this article. You stated that this draft did not meet minimum guidelines for citations, however you were not more specific than that. Will you please be more specific? The help page for minimum guidelines is incredibly long, and from your comment it seemed as though you could be referring to anything in a 20 page span of help topics.

I added additional citations to the end of each paragraph where appropriate, but even this extra step did not seem necessary. GgEb (talk) 18:13, 7 July 2015 (UTC)


 * Looks fine now, feel free to resubmit it. Sulfurboy (talk) 18:14, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

Winifred Gill article
Winifred Gill article accepted. Thank you! MerielGJones (talk) 19:15, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

Tom Crowl Wikipedia Page
I just got notification of my Wikipedia page about ventriloquist Tom Crowl got rejected. I added more, hopefully legitimate, references. Could you please look at it before I submit it for a 4th time and see if it looks like it will pass before I wait for two to three weeks just to get a rejection again? Thanks for all your help and all you do for the community! https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Tom_Crowl Ventdanieljay (talk) — Preceding undated comment added 20:41, 7 July 2015 (UTC)


 * It still wouldn't pass. We need articles that specifically talk about the person. All the articles just talk about the studio or course and his mention is WP:ROUTINE. Sulfurboy (talk) 20:43, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

Bridgenex
Hello, Sulfurboy! I noticed that you speedy-declined the submission of User:Schiappetta/Bridgenex saying that the article already exists on Wikipedia. But it doesn't. I deleted that article on July 2. On July 6 I restored it to the user's userspace. There is no article Bridgenex on Wikipedia at this time. --MelanieN (talk) 18:42, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
 * I declined it because Draft:Bridgenex already exists. I meant to select the submission option, not the mainspace option. Thanks for pointing this out. I'll fix it. Sulfurboy (talk) 18:45, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Both of them are by the same user: one is a draft he had started after the original was deleted, then the other is the original article I restored and userfied. You are right they can't both be submitted. The writer will have to focus on one and let the other go. --MelanieN (talk) 21:04, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

Article rejection
Hello Sulfurboy,

I just had an article for Qrator rejected because it is claimed it reads too much like an advertisement. Could you please give me a more detailed feedback than what is stated on Wikipedia:Spam page? I have was advised by the editorial team on #IRC to write this article like twitter and it has been rejected. In fact, I think the Twitter article is written in a much more biased way than my article. Please help. I have spent 12 hours trying to write this and reference it right... Many thanks.

Jasoniliou (talk) 18:43, 7 July 2015 (UTC)User:Jasoniliou
 * The entire article reads more like a press release than an encyclopedic article. You should implement more independent and outside commentary on the company and eliminate the superflous amounts of company info that reads more like an about page from their website. Sulfurboy (talk) 21:07, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

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Request on 01:54:51, 8 July 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Hcrater
I would like more specific information about which phrases or sentences that you found to be copied or pasted. I made substantial rewriting of sections (involving long definitions primarily) that were copied from 0912.2935...I would like to know if they are different. Hcrater (talk) 01:54, 8 July 2015 (UTC)

Hcrater (talk) 01:54, 8 July 2015 (UTC)

Please Advice
Hello, Thank you for your review (and rejection) of my article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Roomer. I am wondering if you read my references, if so, you will find out my written contents are neutral and loyally true from the references which are mostly top class of media. Could you give some helps: indicating which sentences you think are not neutral and not true. And this is not an Ad. Thank you. --Indepentten (talk) 01:48, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

Advice
Hello, First thank you for assistance with my article.https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Joseph_W._Papin Second, my questions. 1st, you posted a link rot warning on the page and I am redoing all of those citations. Second, How can I improve the "grade" of the article from start level to something higher? Thanks again for your helpJrptwins (talk) 00:58, 9 July 2015 (UTC) I am now using the book template and the reference looks like this

It has the url within the reference but it is not a direct outside link. Am I doing it correctly now?Jrptwins (talk) 01:27, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

It's me again, I think I did all the books correctly using the template for books. I don't want to be presumptuous and remove the link rot warning myself. But if I have done it successfully can I or could you take it off? I still would like to know (when you have a chance how to go about making the article have a better grade than "start". Thank you for your time. I am sure you are swamped with work on Wikipedia. Jrptwins (talk) 04:33, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

A barnstar for you!
You're very welcome, and thank for your service, if I can ever help with something else, please let me know. Sulfurboy (talk) 05:17, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

A kitten for you!
Thanks Sulfurboy for encouragement on trying to get my first article done. The feedback on notability (which clearly I should have read in more detail before I submitted...) should help me improve it. Cheers!

57dmenace (talk) 05:40, 9 July 2015 (UTC)  Which article? Considering your kindness I'd like to help if I can....I'm a sucker for kittens, haha. Sulfurboy (talk) 05:46, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

Nasty P
Hi, I dont know if im doing this correctly as Im not 100% perfect at wiki, however my article was declinded first of all for the words used, i changed these and now my article declinded for something totally different .. surely if this was a problem first time round I would have been told ?? all the links provided are references to the person, I was told in the wiki chat that they were fine

can you please explain further

Azura81 (talk) 07:06, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

Singapore Tyler Print Institute
You have recently accepted this draft. Regrettably the referencing is not of the standard that is acceptable. I have started to flag the inappropriate referencing and have found it to be a lengthy PR piece full of WP:BOMBARD. I wonder if you would take a further look, please. The simplest solution is to return it to the Draft: namespace and to give the WP:COI contributing editor guidance. Fiddle  Faddle  10:16, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

Your request regarding re-review Draft:Quantum thermodynamics
Draft:Quantum thermodynamics

Hello Sulfurboy,

Regarding your request to explain why this article should be re-reviewed, please see comments by Tnd1111, AndreXuereb and Lmikmik on the page Draft:Quantum thermodynamics. We believe that these comments by professional researchers explain beyond any doubt why this article is not at all related to Quantum statistical mechanics, and therefore should not be merged with Quantum statistical mechanics. Furthermore, the current redirection is misleading and contradicts the terminology used by the physical community. Best wishes Lmikmik (talk) 10:31, 9 July 2015 (UTC)
 * User:Lmikmik, you should take this up on Talk:Quantum statistical mechanics, and/or on Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Physics. Drmies (talk) 15:42, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

15:29:05, 9 July 2015 review of submission by 40.132.64.33
Can you please help me understand what needs to be done further and why the article continues to get rejected. The recommendation says to "add citations to reliable sources." I've done this by adding manual ref tags. I'm at a loss for what to do next. Thank you.

40.132.64.33 (talk) 15:29, 9 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Citations need to be added to prove that this local bank is notable by our standards, such as WP:CORP. Hint: local credit unions are very rarely notable: existence doesn't equate to notability. Sorry. Drmies (talk) 15:43, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Society for Canadian Women in Science and Technology has been accepted
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18:38:11, 9 July 2015 review of submission by Koenkamphuys
Thank you for reviewing my page on Supreme Records of Los Angeles. It the first article I started myself (so please bear with me) when I found out that at least two articles link to the wrong Supreme Records (see the article's talk page).

As I understand the quality of the sources I used in the first place, did not suffice. You linked to a page about notability of music articles, but that unfortunately does not have a section about record labels, so I have tried to understand from the general guidelines and I have tried to improve my article with a few citations from books and from Billboard Magazine.

Thank you for your time.

Koenkamphuys (talk) 18:38, 9 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Approved. Good work. Sulfurboy (talk) 18:42, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

"Forwarded YouTube video" source
Hi there! You just reviewed Draft:Yuno.co for me and I thank you! I do want to ask about your comment: "Lot of sources hinge on what is basically a forwarded youtube video." The source you refer to is a full-length podcast by an independent reporter and publishing company who focuses on African American entrepreneurs. I checked Wiki's source guidelines WP:RELIABLE, and they say "However, audio, video, and multimedia materials that have been recorded then broadcast, distributed, or archived by a reputable party may also meet the necessary criteria to be considered reliable sources." Before I revise, I'd love to get further explanation on why the podcast isn't a suitable source. Thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Katie at ABZ Creative (talk • contribs) 19:55, 9 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes, but the problem with this video is that it is an interview and thus a primary source, not independent. Sulfurboy (talk) 20:01, 9 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Gotcha. Thanks! Katie at ABZ Creative (talk) 20:14, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

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I added information to the heading section to give the reader context. Thanks for the comment!
The cGAS – STING cytosolic DNA sensing pathway — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kissiovd (talk • contribs) 01:38, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Request on 03:53:45, 10 July 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Opensourceguru
Hello, Thank you so much for reviewing my article on B. Shree Sundarkumar. I am writing to see if you would be able to advice and assist me in creating the page. I created the draft with a brief bio of his just to understand if it may help the reviewers. I think his page would be notable because there are several other artists who are as the same league of Shree Sundarkumar and they have Wiki articles already. For e.g., https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kanjira_Ganesh_Kumar https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/V._Selvaganesh https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pete_Lockett

Moreover, Sundar Kumar has been learning music from the age of three and is a prodigy in terms of rhythm music. So I think it would be valuable to have a page for him.

I also think the page would be a great way for the world to learn about Kanjira music, and know of his art specifically. I think it would be fitting only if a top percussionist is also included in a page. He is definitely one of the better players of kanjira of our times. Importantly I think he seems to be creating a bridge between Indian music and Western music. He seems to be very active in the Kanjira and Carnatic music circuit in India. This is through various independent sources I have personally verified. Here is one more source: A concert video featuring him at the Kennedy center with the prominent late musician U Srinivas. He has been fortunate to be part of the first Maximum India festival in Washington. http://www.kennedy-center.org/explorer/videos/?id=M4504

Also see note from another album from a recording company. http://www.abstractlogix.com/xcart/product.php?productid=25647

Hope this is helpful. Let me know if you have suggestions and I will work on incorporating those.

Thank you so much.

Opensourceguru (talk) 03:53, 10 July 2015 (UTC)


 * : The existence of similar articles does not mean another article should be included nor does it show notability see WP:INN guideline. Also, I'm glad you have a strong passion for this person and that style of music, but your passion for it does not denote notability. I advise you look to (as suggested in the decline) WP:MUSIC for what denotes notability and what sources are needed to show it. Sulfurboy (talk) 04:10, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

05:37:16, 10 July 2015 review of submission by 68.69.199.231
Re: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Martha_Brockenbrough What are you suggesting? That I remove references already there, or should I add to what I've done, several times already? 68.69.199.231 (talk) 05:37, 10 July 2015 (UTC)James 68.69.199.231 (talk) 05:37, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure what you're asking? I think you are mistakenly responding to Lamona's comment? Sulfurboy (talk) 05:39, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

04:50:16, 10 July 2015 review of submission by Kgrandia
Kgrandia (talk) 04:50, 10 July 2015 (UTC) Just wondering how to improve the Jack Woodward submission, I included references and external links to the watershed cases he has represented to the Supreme Court of Canada defending First Nations rights as well as the textbook he wrote and updates for new editions every year for use a major law schools across the country.
 * Please look to the comment I already made on the draft. Sulfurboy (talk) 04:51, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Thanks, I see that and I have added some points and external references, but how do I cite some of these cases where they are being cited as precedent setting cases then used and referred to in other cases? Their use as precedence is what makes most of these very significant and that is shown through their multiple references in future cases -- not say a news article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kgrandia (talk • contribs) 05:07, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * You need to find sources that cite them as being notable. Notability isn't just inherently assumed on Wikipedia. For example, find a news article that states blah blah case was a significant one, etc. Sulfurboy (talk) 05:13, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Gotcha -- adding in Journal references, news articles where I can find them -- and as it turns out some of these cases are so big they have their own wikipedia page, so I am linking to them -- on the right track now? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kgrandia (talk • contribs) 05:25, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes, but keep in mind wikipedia can't be a source for itself.

Okay. Thanks. Think I've nailed it. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kgrandia (talk • contribs) 05:44, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Okay, but also keep in mind you need independent articles that talk about the person themself and they need to be non-primary. Sulfurboy (talk) 05:47, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Requesting review of AFC
hi Graham, may I request you to have a look at Draft:Exilant Technologies AFC submission whenever feasible. Thanks and Regards. Devopam (talk) 05:55, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Great article so far. Likely will approve and clean up soon, just give me a few minutes. Sulfurboy (talk) 06:00, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Appreciate the quick revert. Thank you for your encouraging feedback and help in clean-up. Learnt a few more things today in terms of what not to do in future :) Devopam (talk) 06:15, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Sure, and if you have a article of that good of quality in the future then page me and I'll be happy to directly check it out. Sulfurboy (talk) 06:17, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Your submission at Articles for creation: Tony de Peltrie has been accepted
 Tony de Peltrie, which you submitted to Articles for creation, has been created.

You are more than welcome to continue making quality contributions to Wikipedia. . Thank you for helping improve Wikipedia! Sulfurboy (talk) 06:44, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * If you have any questions, you are welcome to ask at the  [//en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:WikiProject_Articles_for_creation/Help_desk&action=edit&section=new&nosummary=1&preload=Template:AfC_talk/HD_preload&preloadparams%5B%5D=Tony_de_Peltrie help desk] .
 * If you would like to help us improve this process, please consider.

Request on 07:48:14, 10 July 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Fearwinner
Article I wrote did not accept for now and So I need help to make modification

I have written this article after a research on wikipedia, I have seen many articles and they all were written in the same format that is why I chose same format to create the content. Please help and tell me which part or the article needs modification or what kind of modification should be made to get it publish on wikipedia.Fearwinner (talk) 07:48, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Fearwinner (talk) 07:48, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Lines like "With each passing day, Gujarat Foils moved ahead towards developing productive ways to establish market goodwill." aren't neutral unless they can be supported with solid sources. There are a few instances of promoting language like that which is not properly supported.

08:36:12, 10 July 2015 review of submission by Onlinejonathan
Hi there, this is the first I am getting this feedback..the problem was with the sources all along and I added many as can see. Please explain what do you mean since one of the editors even rewrite it. Onlinejonathan (talk) 08:36, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Onlinejonathan (talk) 08:36, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Tony de Peltrie
Hello Sulfurboy, I received your information : ''This submission appears to be taken from http://proxy2974.my-addr.org/myaddrproxy.php/https/de.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tony_de_Peltrie. Wikipedia cannot accept material copied from elsewhere, unless it explicitly exists under a compatible licence and is written in an acceptable tone—this includes material that you own the copyright to''

I, Maxim Pouska, wrote the article in German for the WP:DE - I own the copyright. The I translatet the text from German into English for the WP:EN (it is not a machine translation)- also my copyright. Then I fixed the text on my user:maxim pouska space. After this I asked user:Philg88 on his talk site for help. [Tony de Peltrie] After all correction I submited the text to review. OK - I missing her a licenc - is it ok if I put this on my talk page of the artikel? - "Content in this edit is translated by Maxim Pouska from the existing German Wikipedia article (by Maxim Pouska) at de:Tony de Peltrie; see its history for attribution." Thanks for your help.--Maxim Pouska (talk) 08:39, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * All sorted now, the article is in main space. Philg88 ♦talk 09:22, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Request on 10:52:49, 10 July 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Fearwinner
Article edited and resubmitted

Dear Sulfurboy, I have edited my article. I removed all the peacock terms, removed the promotional content. The sources for citation and references I used all are independent and makes the content notable. Please move my article at the main place.Fearwinner (talk) 10:52, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Fearwinner (talk) 10:52, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

17:11:03, 10 July 2015 review of submission by Sean p connors
I removed the first paragraph in an attempt to make my article less 'essay' like, to address your review comments. This article is a definition and encyclopedic content as to Cybersecurity capability measurement, which has been widely used for decades, and contains all references to the existing contruct of the model. Sean p connors (talk) 17:11, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * The issue is like the entire article is quite lacking in sourcing and citations. It's hard to verify claims, and presents a real concern over original research. Sulfurboy (talk) 18:20, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

17:10:21, 10 July 2015 review of submission by AnVan
I went back through to check for non-neutral terms, but this is my first work on Wikipedia, so if there is more to be done, please take time to make a note or two that specifically says why the draft was rejected. As far as citations go, the archives that I mention at Linfield college are in the process of going live, so the digital commons will eventually by linked into the article. We have an entire collection of primary documents that are difficult to cite, as they no longer exist elsewhere, or never were published to the internet. (Dr. Dirks-Edmunds' bulk of research occurred before the 70s) Linfield College holds all rights to the collection and photos.

AnVan (talk) 17:10, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Looks better now. Let me know when you resubmit it. Sulfurboy (talk) 18:21, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Ciklum
Dear Sulfurboy, My article (Draft:Ciklum) was declined. Please advise me what exactly not suitable with references in that article? Article has references from trusted resources like Bloomberg. Forbes.ua, Computerweekly, Kyivpost etc. Let's delete text that looks not suitable Nikols70 (talk) 12:08, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Answered on another talk page. Sulfurboy (talk) 18:24, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Draft:Jerome Strong | Submission declined on 9 July 2015 by Sulfurboy (talk).
When you said that referencing is an issue I am not sure how citations to Yale, Auburn etc and all the books published by the poet are not adequate. Can you look again to reconsider? or suggest specifically what you mean. Thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by RiqueThur (talk • contribs) 12:26, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * I would recommend reading WP:42 and WP:BIO which were already linked in the decline. The citations to Yale and Auburn only mention the person in pass and aren't independent dedicated sources on the subject to show his notability. Further, books being published by someone does not automatically make them notable. Sulfurboy (talk) 18:24, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

11:27:50, 10 July 2015 review of submission by Lpartner
Seeking advice on how to improve this article. I modelled it after sierra wireless, used more independent sources than they did, didn''t use any adjectives and certainly no peacock words in the text. I am at a bit of a loss and would seek more specific feedback if possible. Lpartner (talk) 11:27, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Looks as if its been addressed now. Sulfurboy (talk) 18:25, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Plays for England
This is a book, which comprises two plays which have separate articles. I don't want to merge them as they are not always performed together. I don't want to call it a disamb page, as this will automatically set of disambiguation notices whenever it is linked, which is not appropriate. Is there a way of avoiding this without covering the page with inappropriate tags (some categories could be added)? I'm not asking you to "FIX" anything, just point me to a relevant guideline page. Paul B (talk) 19:00, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Matt Hannaford page
Hey Graham,

I'm wondering what else I can do to get https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Matt_Hannaford approved. I have added numerous citations from independent, reliable websites, and changed a number of sources to make it more notable and newsworthy from the first version. I feel it is an unbiased interpretation of someone who is pretty important in the baseball community. Writing this as someone who is a fan of baseball and has no affiliation with the subject or any relation to the subject, please let me know your thoughts on how it can get approved. Thanks. Baseballfan26 (talk) 18:26, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * I simply do not see him as being notable, I'm not accusing you in anyway with being affiliated. Please review WP:BIO, we need independent, reliable sources that actually discuss the person, not players they are associated with. Further, there are many unsourced claims about his life that would need to be sourced before publication as Wiki has high standards for citations in biographies of living people. Sulfurboy (talk) 18:31, 10 July 2015 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your feedback. Isn't it a matter of opinion on whether or not someone is notable? A sports agent really isn't featured in that many articles, but still plays an important role in the industry. I found some more articles to help with the personal information and more of the non-baseball related material so hopefully that will help with the submission. Baseballfan26 (talk) 21:38, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Amarna letter EA10
Hello Sulfurboy,

I added some more info to the Amarna Letter EA10 article. Whalestate (talk) 21:42, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

23:23:05, 10 July 2015 review of submission by Malcolmwoodhams
MalcolmWoodhams (talk) 23:23, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Hi. Thank you for reviewing my article on The Association of Guernsey Charities. I am obviously disappointed that it doesn't currently meet all of the requirements for inclusion, however I have now added some additional citations to external sources, including some newspaper/media articles.

Are you able to advise if this is more satisfactory - or should I resubmit for further review?

Thanks for your help

Malcolm


 * I was about to approve it then I ran a copyright check and noticed a violation. You can find details about it on the page. Sulfurboy (talk) 23:52, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Need clarification
Saw that you rejected the page https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:The_Ska_Vengers due to the following reason.

"Citation style is confusing and makes it impossible to confirm claims, and thus notability."

would help if you were a bit more elaborate. The band in question is one of the leading ones coming from the region, and adequate links were provided to support each and every sentence there is on this page. So please be a bit more elaborate. Thanks. Routinewalker — Preceding unsigned comment added by Routinewalker (talk • contribs) 23:40, 10 July 2015 (UTC)
 * A review of WP:CS should help. Sulfurboy (talk) 23:54, 10 July 2015 (UTC)

Camille Felton
Hi Sulfurboy. I may have been a bit tough when I said "Removing content and then nominating for deletion is inappropriate". However it is also tough on the writers when pages are nominated for deletion. Thanks for withdrawing your nomination at Articles for deletion/Camille Felton. My real issue is the statement you made "That original section was a copyvio and needed to be blanked". If it is really a copyvio then we need to do something about it. It looks to be a translation of the French Wikipedia page with appropriate edit summary. When I check fr:Camille Felton I see that another web site has made a copyvio by copying that with inadequate attribution. But can you state the nature of the violation you noticed? Graeme Bartlett (talk) 00:05, 11 July 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure how to run the copyvios report an old revision, but iirc the original body of the article was taken from a bio website. You can see it in the revision history in the edit around my nomination. Sulfurboy (talk) 00:12, 11 July 2015 (UTC)

Sherman’s Special Field Orders, No. 64 (series 1864)
Has been resubmitted with some addition. I have been working on expanding the article on "Atlanta in the American Civil War". In the article I included special order 39 as part of the article. That was before I found out about the category for "American Civil War documents". Since S.O. 39 is included in another article, it does not appear in the category list, so I thought it would be helpful to others if I placed S.O. 64 as a separate article. Hope the additional info I added will improve the article enough. If accepted, I will update "Atlanta in the American Civil War / Occupation of Atlanta (Sept 3 – Nov 15, 1864)" to point to the new article.

Thanks for you help.

On the subject of Special Field Orders - While they are Quotations, the Quotation template does not really work for them. Is there a better way to handle them? See: http://ebooks.library.cornell.edu/cgi/t/text/pageviewer-idx?c=moawar&cc=moawar&idno=waro0076&node=waro0076%3A4&view=image&seq=803&size=100 For how S.O. 64 is formatted in the Official record.

Thanks again (hope I did not add this twice, I new to this and not sure what I am doing) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hooks34 (talk • contribs) 00:22, 11 July 2015 (UTC)