User talk:Surferboiz/sandbox

Peer Review
Overall, I think this is a strong start for your article. Your topic is very broad, but the way you structured/broke-up your article made it concise and easy to follow. Obviously, there are a few portions that are not completely written or complete, but the bullet points and ideas you have written are strong. I like your ideas about linking to other Wiki articles and more specific topics throughout your article. If it works as you say it will, I think it will be very helpful to the reader. In terms of readability, the intro works well and outlines your plan, but I think parts of your “Possible Causes” section are a little too high-level/medical. Just read it one more time with the “high school level” in mind. Again, I think you have a strong start to your article, just wrap up the last few sections and ensure you're breaking everything down as simply as you can. Drdopeboi (talk) 00:11, 10 April 2023 (UTC)