User talk:Susan2016

Welcome
Hi Susan. Welcome to Wikipedia!

I'm an online ambassador for your Global Youth Studies course. If you have any questions or need help with anything, feel free to leave me a message over on my talk page. You can also find help at the Teahouse, at the links on Questions, or on IRC. Gobōnobō + c 05:30, 30 August 2013 (UTC)

Hiya!
Hi Susan this is Hector from your Global Youth studies class. Just wanted to let you know a little about myself such as I am a junior transfer student and I am studying Law, Politics, and Society. I currently have an AA in criminal Justice and I am an immigrant from Mexico, specifically the state of Puebla. I look forward to having class with you!Camotero2013 (talk) 03:02, 6 September 2013 (UTC)

Hello
Hi Susan! My name is Kayla and I was just stopping by to say hello and tell you a little bit about myself! My name is Kayla, I am currently a senior here at Drake. I am double majoring in English and Study of Culture and Society and also am working towards a Women's Studies Concentration. I'm excited for the semester and can't wait to learn more about Global Youth with you and our other classmates.

Kapplet (talk) 17:15, 8 September 2013 (UTC)

Suggestions
Susan,

Great ideas! I'm not sure if you've talked to Professor Vandegrift about this, but another student (or possibly two) worked on youth activism and mass media last semester. I'm sure there's still a lot to be done, it's becoming increasingly more prominent since the expansion of social media and all the activity going on in the Middle East. Youth Activism would be a great place to continue doing work. Maybe you could add another country or two in the global youth activism section? Best of Luck!

AbbeyMaynard (talk) 19:16, 18 September 2013 (UTC)

3 paragraph summary of topic
I have decided to narrow my interest of youth involvement in activism to edit the Wikipedia page Youth Activism. The article has a great start, but it needs more development. I also feel there needs to be a section added about the ways in which you get involved in activism, such as through social media, and should be a main point of the article. Also reading the article there are a few small errors and organization that needs refining. There also isn't a lot of information on youth activism from the past 10-20 years, so more current information needs to be added.

I have found quite a few scholarly sources on instances of global youth activism. Such as
 * "Redefining youth activism through digital technology in Singapore"
 * "Political activism of Palestinian Youth: Exploring individual, Parental, and Ecological Factors" ,
 * "Video Blogging and Youth Activism in Malaysia", and
 * "Creating the Quiet Majority? Youth and Young People in the Political Culture of the Cuban Revolution".

I feel these are great start to show not only youth activism around the globe, but also the use of technology and social media in the spread of youth activism. The article only covers a few countries, I would like to expand on this section to cover multiple instances of youth activism.

I hope to add more sections to the Global youth activism heading, such as Cuba, Egypt, Palestine and Malaysia. I also wish to add a new section on the use of technology and social media in youth activism, which I believe is an important aspect of youth activism for the current generation and has caused a rise in youth activism. I look forward to expanding this Wikipedia article and providing new information to the Wikipedia community. --Susan2016 (talk) 05:23, 25 September 2013 (UTC)

Feedback on 9/25 proposal

 * Hi Susan! You have located some pieces that look great for your ongoing work.  I also love your efforts to add hyperlinks to your post!  I cleaned up the bullet points of your references a bit to make them easier to read.  What do you think?  I LOVE your careful citations.  Given some feedback we got on the talk page, I think it would be appropriate to post your revised plans to your user page.

I encourage you to both "add global examples," like the country additions and the bigger questions we have been discussing in class. How does a global youth studies analysis look different from a youth studies analysis? What will be different about the NPOV because we are decentering the Global north?

Finally - I'm reminding all students to check out the list of reminders on theSeptember 26 post on our course talk page. Try to archive the old sections of your talk page, for example!

Great work!

Cheers - Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 19:44, 26 September 2013 (UTC)

A kitten for you!
Good first proposal!

Prof.Vandegrift (talk) 19:44, 26 September 2013 (UTC) 

Topic Feedback
Hi Susan,

Everything looks really great right now in your proposal. Just a few things to think about as you move forward. Start thinking about where your new section on Social Media could fit in the article. I almost feel it would work well in the 'Forms' section, but I also think it could potentially look really strange just having one subheading under the larger category. If you have time and want to place Social Media in the 'Forms' section, maybe you could think of another topic that could be housed in 'Forms'. Some smaller things you could do for this article to make it a lot better are to remove some of the hyperlinks. The article has things like civil rights and population hyperlinked. the purpose of a hyperlink is to provide additional information for someone who wants to learn more about an otherwise-unknown topic; its safe to assume that civil rights is something the reader knows about it they are in an article about methods of obtaining civil rights. The 'Overview' section could either use a better title, or it can be consolidated with the lead paragraph. Just some other ideas to think about.

AbbeyMaynard (talk) 19:40, 2 October 2013 (UTC)

Draft Feedback
Susan,

Nice start! I really like the ideas you've started to focus on and wish to include in the article. I also see that you've chosen to reorganize the global example section in alphabetical order. I might suggest doing it by alphabetical order, but doing it by region so connections between areas -- say, The Middle East-- can be better communicated to the user. Some more minor things: there are too many unnecessary hyperlinks in the article, particularly in the lead-in paragraph. Figure out what could be done without. Also, the outline box in the article is visually disrupting. Play around with it and try to move it.

AbbeyMaynard (talk) 02:24, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

Feedback on the youth activism draft
Hi Susan2016.

Your draft of youth activism looks to be coming along nicely. I'm glad you're taking a critical look at the material that already existed in the article.


 * About the 'Forms' section: You could probably remove this section, but I would encourage you to still address the different degrees of control and autonomy that youth have within their activist pursuits. I'm not familiar with all of the academic literature on the topic, but the idea that there are 'three main forms of youth activism' seems to overcompartmentalize. It seems to be more of a continuum with some organizations engaging youth voice to a larger extent than others. We Fight to Win will have probably additional insights on the matter and would make a good source.


 * The technology section could use some more detail. I think this section could use examples, observations, or trends that differentiate between the way youth activists engage with technology and the way any other activist would.


 * One aspect of youth activism that you could address in more detail is its history. The global examples are a good mix of contemporary and historical cases though. Someday we may want to have a separate article for History of youth activism. In the meantime it could be a section in your article or it could just be addressed in a sentence or two in say the lead paragraph of the 'Global youth activism' section.


 * For the individual countries in the 'Global youth activism', you might want to expand the entries that only include a single sentence.

Let me know if you need me to clarify or would like help with anything. You're doing great. Gobōnobō + c 23:01, 10 November 2013 (UTC)

Draft Feedback
Here are a few suggestions before you take your article live.

If you have things that aren't cited, either add a citation or remove the information before you take it live. These are the types of things you'll be chastised for in the WP community. Your overview section is quite lengthy, try to put that info in other sections if you can, otherwise, cut it back a bit. The 2nd paragraph in the overview section also seems too optimistic and not realistic enough about youth. Consider revising and changing word choice around a bit. Also, read over the South Africa section and work on clarifying word choice. In general, add more information about the Middle East and more hyperlinks. Besides that, it's look quite good.

AbbeyMaynard (talk) 22:06, 13 November 2013 (UTC)