User talk:Svela01/sandbox

Hphan10 (talk) 18:34, 16 November 2019 (UTC)== Review - Hieu Phan ==

Reviewer 1 Hieu Phan

Abstract: You addressed all the bullet points for the abstract part of this section. It is very concise and did not included any unnecessary information. The visual enhanced the understanding of the abstract.
 * Hallmark Features/Key characteristics
 * Main Idea
 * Definitions of the disease
 * One complete paragraph consisting of 300 words or less
 * Alternate names

Signs and Symptoms: I believe you included majority of the signs and symptoms in the abstract which resulted in this section being very minimal. it is possible that you are in the process of finishing this in which I highly suggest for you to do. Your abstract started out very professional and very wiki-like.
 * Clear and Concise
 * Signs and symptoms found in patients with the disease and associated conditions
 * Is there variation in the signs or symptoms, and if so, why?

Cause: Again, this section is very minimal. It is possible that you are in the process of finishing. Don't forget to include references.
 * Identify Main Cause: How the disease occurred including Environmental causes, genetic factors
 * Include any (medical) associations related to Main Cause
 * Include diagram explaining cause of disease if relevant

Mechanism/Pathophysiology: Good start but it feels like you have not finish this section yet. Don't forget to include references.
 * Define Mechanism
 * Explain Physiology Involved and Its Effect On The Body
 * Possible pathway or signaling cascade if known
 * Explain possible interactions of different body systems due to the disease.

Diagnosis: Good start on the diagnosis section; however, you simply just started the generic molecular methods. If possible, you could breakdown each methods and how each method diagnosis this disease.
 * Testing Available
 * Family/Medical History
 * Include brief overall sentence that gives general diagnostic method
 * include classification if there are different "types" of the disease

Overall, the wiki article feels very incomplete or due to the nature of the disease and available data. However, it is very promising but it does require a lot of refinement and more information.

Sweiner02 (talk) 16:35, 7 December 2019 (UTC)
 * Needs a lot of links to other wikipedia articles.
 * Just cite your sources, don't talk about them.
 * Just incorporate presentation into symptoms. The current division is confusing.
 * Missing prognosis, recent research, epidemiology.
 * Citations are incomplete. Add information to your citations.