User talk:Swartsse/sandbox

I evaluated an article about Shawn Johnson East. The content of this article I thought was very organized, and went through many important events in her life. When the article talks about her personal life there could be more about her husband. The tone is very laid back just casually talking about all her accomplishments. Lots of support from different sources I dont think it needs mI evaluated an article about Shawn Johnson East. The content of this article I thought was very organized, and went through many important events in her life. When the article talks about her personal life there could be more about her husband. The tone is very laid back just casually talking about all her accomplishments. Lots of support from different sources I dont think it needs more.

SeaWorld (Swartsse (talk) 16:19, 31 October 2018 (UTC))

My plan of action for the sea world article:

-With the history expand more on how it affects how many people attended

- more information on the orcas and their habitat

-Lots of references are listed

-Mid importance on the San Diego sea world

-Look at the language that is used (Swartsse (talk) 16:19, 31 October 2018 (UTC))

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So i have looked at how each park has numerous pages and they still said that the parks could get more information on just this page.

When i am looking at the language it looks bias where there are only talking negatively about SeaWorld and the animals there.

Im deleting the SeaWorld Ohio page because it has its own page and it does not make sense having that section in there it makes it more confusing.

The whole page needs organized into what section goes where because it doesn't make sense.

The orca section only talks about the injuries and fatal events so there needs to be more about the orcas and their habitat. Going along with that there are other animals at SeaWorld other than orcas so the other animals need to be talked about as well.

The response to the drive hunt /breeding section needs to be updated because it doesn't clearly state whether it is over or not.(Swartsse (talk) 16:19, 31 October 2018 (UTC))