User talk:Swiernicki/sandbox

Averyw1086 (talk) 01:54, 5 April 2019 (UTC) Avery's Peer Review of Swiernicki's Article: Utilitarian Bioethics (Adding peer review even though information hasn't been transferred to wiki article yet)


 * I like how you reintroduce QALY and how it is related to utilitarian bioethics and resource distribution.
 * Add/Introduce possible social/political/medical arguments in addition to economic arguments?
 * Also, the information in the "Economic argument" heading isn't fully pertaining to Economics (Triage info).
 * "Productive and or happy status" sounds weird, I'd only use that wording if it's used in other viable sources.
 * Maybe have a new header for the last paragraph of "Economic argument" for better organization/structure? Like "Benefits vs Possible consequences"?
 * Use more references for the text, because I see that you have a ton of references in your sandbox but only 4 are used in the article.
 * Good use of neutral content!
 * Fix the grammar errors! For example, run on sentences, use of "its'" instead of "its", use of QALY/qaly/qualy, etc.
 * Overall, good input but definitely work on the grammar and possibly add more concepts/perspectives/arguments of Utilitarian Bioethics.


 * I agree with the structure and heading changes. I will correct the grammar errors as well as adding more content to the article. Thanks for the feedback.Swiernicki (talk) 20:15, 9 April 2019 (UTC)