User talk:Sxbrow13/sandbox

One of things things I enjoyed about Shamuri’s article was the first off, the article he choose. His topic was Feminist sociology and one main topic he discussed in this paper was feminism, race, and the status it had on the people. One of the topics I liked about this paper was how Sham took a quote from a previous article, “Bounderies and silence in a post feminist sociology”, and how the quote talked about feminism being taken from granted and finding a way to connect this article to the topic he choose. One of the thing Sham could do better with this essay is to make it a little longer. Obviously this is a rough draft and all but some of the information he used had other parts to continue on. But other than that, Sham is on the right track to writing a fine paper.

Feedback on draft
Shamauri: This is a good overview. The next step is to revise your writing so that it will be appropriate for a Wikipedia page. Instead of writing, "one of my articles says," write that "YYY argues that ...." or "ZZZ shows that..." Ditto for "authors of the article" - specify who they are. Also, make sure that you add citations. Mbrzycki (talk) 22:39, 25 March 2019 (UTC)