User talk:Sydneycurrie5/sandbox

This is awesome! It's a great start to our "education" section in our article. (I think I found a little more information about her education in one of the sources I used... I'll add it later.

The just have a couple minor points: - Maybe link "Queen's College Belfast" to its relevant Wikipedia article? So we give the reader some more context on her school/education. - The first two sentences could be condensed into one. For example: "Dr. Elizabeth Gould Bell attended Queen's College Belfast, where after her undergraduate studies she completed a one year study at the Art's Faculty. (Is this accurate?) Maybe to better explain the context to Elizabeth Gould Bell transferring into medicine, change the "After 1889, it became" to "After 1889, 'it had become.." (In your second to last sentence). Just to make it a little clearer! :)

These are just my ideas though! You do whatever you think is best. :)

-♥--Isamouse79 (talk) 21:14, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

We should look more into the other women you mentioned. there might be a mention of her in their lives. I think the other comment says all the relevant critiques. SocksOfDeath (talk) 15:41, 1 April 2019 (UTC)

Generally good information, but what is the article that you are working on? Maybe link your article to your assigned article. Other than that, looks good.ChristalCao (talk) 15:52, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Great information and factual based evidence. Maybe expand a little more on some of the sentences but overall it looks good. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Wohlina (talk • contribs) 15:57, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Great information about education, it might be better if you could add some of specific details.That might not centralize your topic in fixed domains. Samuelzhao000005 (talk) 15:59, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Samuelzhao000005

Great job using fact-based information and language. I would just add some more information and add some quick links to the other women mentioned. I would also add a comma before and or separate the last sentence into two as it is a run on. Lorenaramirezl (talk) 16:04, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Was very interesting to read, I learned something new today. To improve, just talk more about the historical aspect and how it links to the current day practice, and how that moment was extremely important in the medical field.Charlier118 (talk) 16:09, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Great use of fact-based articles as an outside source. Even though you don't have a large amount of writing so far, it is great to see such a large amount of citations being used in such a small space. This is great! Would love to know what article you are working on so consider linking the primary article to this page. Otherwise, great work so far! I look forward to seeing the progress! Jaredgoz (talk) 16:16, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

This is very fact driven and you provide a good amount of information but it may help to get a little more specific/ expand a bit more but overall it looks good! Isabelleshegog (talk) 16:19, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Isabelle

Great job! excited to see more coming — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ilikesleeping1 (talk • contribs) 16:22, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Seems like a good start, looking forward to see more.--Jasonkung22 (talk) 16:36, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Jasonkung22

Great work so far! Your use of citations is good! I would add a few hyperlinks to help your reader. Ashleydavidsongwu (talk) 16:38, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I'm thrilled to see what is gonna be the result of your work. For now, I think you used a good amount of citations compared to the size of the paragraph. You forgot to add the Hyperlinkn of the Wikipedia page that you're editing and I think it's missing some factual details.Rafamatalon1234 (talk) 01:12, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Good job on your page! I really like how you were organized throughout your paragraph. I would suggest adding some hyperlinks and maybe finding more sources! Fariha34 (talk) 02:53, 4 April 2019 (UTC)