User talk:Sydneyey

Welcome!
Hello, Sydneyey, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Feedback
Nice work on your draft. Some feedback (mostly from a formatting perspective) Finally, on a more substantive issue, while you mentioned salaries in the US, you should keep in mind that Wikipedia is an international encyclopedia, so it's always more useful to readers if you try to globalize your coverage using a broader range of countries. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:26, 9 April 2018 (UTC)
 * References go after punctuation, not before.
 * You should add more links to other Wikipedia articles. Any term that's likely to be unfamiliar to the average reader should be linked so that they can learn more about the topic.
 * Try to avoid bullet points. When it comes to explaining things to people who are new to a topic, bullet points are rarely effective tools for communication - they're far more useful as reminders. It's generally better to use sentences and paragraphs that allow you to explain things and put them in context for your readers.