User talk:Symbiodinium/sandbox

Peer Review: Chloe to Sandy

·Good lead section ·"from predators" not "fro" in "Sound" section ·Link to other wikipedia pages especially for key terms ·A lot of references that's good and I don't see any reference being overused so good job! ·Do you need a reference for the last sentence of "Magnetic fields" section? Your tone is a little uncertain in that sentence. ·Pictures? ·I don't know if "hot topics" is the right tone for wikipedia in "Human Impacts" intro section ·Maybe cite more than one study for the "Pollution and Runoff" section just to show a broader perspective.

Peer Review: Ariela to Sandy

Bio ace (talk) 15:16, 5 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Introductory Paragraph: The tone of the paragraph seems like it is being set up for an argumentative piece rather than a strictly information one. I think it would be helpful to restructure to be more neutral in tone: “A pelagic larval stage can be advantageous for many species with an increased dispersal range and decreased risk of inbreeding. Marine larvae have evolved the ability to use a variety of sensory systems at different scales. Without advanced sensory abilities, larvae would be washed away- unable to detect suitable habitat where they could successfully settle”.
 * Hyperlinks to relevant pages would be helpful to the reader.
 * Pictures, if they can be found on the commons, would be very helpful.
 * Magnetic Fields: I think it would be nice to write which species you are referring to, so people know.
 * Vison: How quickly is relatively quickly?
 * Sound: Remove the word “considerable” from the first sentence. Sentence starting with “Many families…”, fix the word from as right now it just says fro. Reword the last sentence of the first paragraph. In the second paragraph, first sentence, remove “Despite evidence of its importance”. In the second sentence of P2 reword the beginning of the sentence to say “Some scientists believe that…”.
 * Human Impacts: Replace “Particularly hot topics” with another phrase.
 * Ocean acidification: The flow of this section is very nice and the tone is perfect. Nice job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bio ace (talk • contribs) 21:02, 30 March 2018 (UTC)