User talk:T.sandzimier/sandbox

Hello, Great job on article selection/evaluation. I'm glad you were able to find articles so closely related to your PE org. -Momo Sumomox4nouchi (talk) 00:21, 8 February 2019 (UTC)sumomox4nouchi

Anna G's peer review
Area: Material Health in Uganda I like that you did some grammar edits to the article, I think these changes definitely make a difference. Under the section, “Distance, quality, bypassing”- you did a good job of incorporating sources and citing! To be honest, I don't see any major changes you need to make- the article already has a bunch on information and I think you did a good job of adding what was needed. (I learned a lot from reading it!)

Sector: Obstetric Fistula First off, I really like your approach of adding to this Wiki article! I have never heard of this medical condition and its very interesting to learn about. I loved that you added to the mental health part of obstetric Fistula- such important information. Many people don't think of the mental challenges that come with medical conditions and mental health can be just as important or even more as the biological part. Your sources fit perfectly with the article and you did a good job of citing. I liked that you also included examples of facilities trying to treat these challenges women face with obstetric fistula. I saw your thoughts about finding scholarly articles focusing on mental health services of obstetric fistula cases I thats exactly what I was thinking you should add. Maybe just adding at least one example would be enough since there is already so much information in this article. Overall, goodjob and I really enjoyed learning about your PE ! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Agallacinao (talk • contribs) 22:34, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Maddy Peer Review
I think your reorganizing makes the article flow better! Your addition of the barriers facing women in Uganda is also very useful in clarifying the issue. Under the mistreatment by medical personnel, I think I would change "whose" in the first sentence to something like which. Overall, I think your additions were very good and the potential next step is an important aspect to include. For your sector article, I think the additions are good; the mental health of women is a very important aspect and how it has affected the women, especially in regards to other medical issues and how they are linked. I also agree with your restructuring of the challenges section to help the flow of the article. Good work!

Mtovsen (talk) 23:07, 4 April 2019 (UTC) Maddy

Responding to Peer Review
Thank you Anna and Maddy for taking the time to provide me with wonderful suggestions and constructive criticism–I super appreciate both of you! Both of you commented on how my editing of grammatical errors and restructuring of some paragraphs/sections in the existing article helped make the article flow better. I completely agree and plan to continue editing key aspects of both articles (ex: consistent spelling of obstetric fistula) because I think that will make each article stronger as a whole. Thank you Maddy for your comment about changing "whose" to a different word in the mistreatment of medical personnel section. I plan to change the sentence to something along these lines: "In 2003, a study was conducted in Hoima, Uganda, which aimed to examine the reasons why..." Besides that, both of you commented on my ideas for the potential next steps I can take (area–focusing on how lack of financial support impact maternal health in Uganda and what that looks like; sector–delving deeper into how obstetric fistula impacts the mental health of women suffering from the condition and different services that have been provided). I am excited to continue finding sources that will enhance these aspects of the existing articles; however, the struggle I have been facing is really trying to narrow the scope of what I want to add to both articles. I feel like I have been finding scholarly articles that don't completely relate to one another, but all have valuable information that could be added to both articles. I wonder if I am approaching this assignment too broadly; however, I am also enjoying adding several different sections/comments on the existing articles. Mental health in Uganda and obstetric fistula are both extremely dense topics, so I think that is why I have been finding articles that make different arguments. I am excited to continue to delve deeper into this research and really appreciate your feedback and support. Best of luck to the both of you! T.sandzimier (talk) 21:47, 11 April 2019 (UTC)