User talk:TGriggs2/sandbox

Hi! Your page is very nice! It looks pretty finished to me. I like that you included different sections for your symptoms and mechanisms. My only concern is that your mechanism is very detailed and normal people who happen to stumble upon your page won't be able to understand everything discussed on there. I don't think it's necessary for you to use the same reference multiple times if you haven't changed the source throughout the writing. It is only necessary to add a new reference number when the source has changed. Overall, I would say your wiki page is very impressive. Keep up the good work! -Jessica Young

I love your page so far! It seems as if you're almost done with it since all the sections have very detailed information on it. I think the only thing that I can suggest is to have links to some of the symptoms so that if a non-science person were to go onto this page, they would have no trouble deciphering what each of the symptoms are. - Janki Patel — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jpatel45 (talk • contribs) 05:19, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

Taneisha great work! Your page looks like a finished page to me. A lot of great citation uses. All of the genetic components are described very nicely. Definitely add links to the symptoms that you put. That will be a nice addition. Other that that you seem to be off to a great start, just continue editing for correct grammar and wording. Shelby Gilyard — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sgilyard (talk • contribs) 18:11, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

--Sweiner02 (talk) 05:29, 25 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Abstract should not have a section title.
 * Abstract should not be a list of definitions. Link or explain!
 * Great general information and structure.
 * Needs LOTS of links to other pages.
 * Make sure that your text is lay accessible.
 * Check for clarity and grammar (issues like In previous research, it states that )
 * Great detail on genes.
 * Be careful with paraphrasing. There are some instances of direct or too close copying of text. (Recent research is the worst on that)
 * Good and consistent citation.