User talk:Taebrahii/sandbox

Emma's Peer Review
First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? Like me, it seems that you have an idea of where you want your article to be but have not yet tackled the task. I think starting off with an outline would be a good idea, maybe doing some restructuring. What changes would you suggest the author(s) apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? "Slightly more formally, a curve is a geodesic if no slight deformation can make it shorter." This is one sentence that stood out at me as not really making sense, that could be a quick edit. In my opinion, it seems that as of right now the Research sub-heading contains some sentences that aren't properly worded and quite hard to follow. As a reader, it lost me and its very convoluted. What's the most important thing the author(s) could do to improve the article? Really making sure you go over that section and clarifying some of the wording. Restructuring it. As a reader, it was very interesting to see the impact of Maryam's death in Iran. Maybe that is something you can expand on, including the difficulty in transitioning culturally from Iran to America? Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! I noticed that I will also have to be discussing some very high-level concepts that might be hard to understand (as you will with Maryam's mathematical contributions) so that will definitely be a feat because I am no physicist, but that's essential to discuss for my article (Sabrina Gonzales Pasterski).

Meghan's peer review
I think this article needs more citations - like there is no citation for the first sentence - so I would add citations to anything that's not already cited. Overall, I think the article has a good structure already in place, so just try to find all the info you can about aspects of his life to fill out the article to its fullest potential. Goldpothos (talk) 00:44, 14 November 2018 (UTC)