User talk:Tagarachel/George H. Balazs

good start
You need the lede section which is a summary of the rest of the article. You have a lot of good material, time to flesh it out, you can do it chronologically but stress what he did or learned at each stage, in other words perhaps the "so what"! Ortiz Crespo (talk) 19:18, 8 March 2023 (UTC)

keep going
the lede needs work, you say was which makes it sound as if he is dead, make it clear he was at NOA but is now retired. read out loud, some of your stuff needs to be smoother Ortiz Crespo (talk) 17:20, 5 April 2023 (UTC)