User talk:Taguzman1/Rheotaxis

External Review
Hi Taguzman1 - My name is Jolie, and I'm the Project Coordinator for the WikiProject Limnology & Oceanography team. Your external reviewer for your article on rheotaxis doesn't have a Wikipedia account, so I'm posting it on your reviewer's behalf. If you have any questions about your review, or would like to clarify anything, please feel free to contact me by email (through your course instructor) or through my talk page so I can pass your message along to your reviewer. Thanks, and all the best as you wrap up your Wikipedia editing assignment!

EXTERNAL REVIEW - Hi, I’m a PhD student from the University of Lethbridge, Canada and very happy to review your content for Wikipedia. In my work, I look at water quality in inland water bodies, how they’ve been impacted by anthropogenic impacts and health of the ecosystems.

You have done a very good job studying many research articles related to the topic. However, I feel like you can improve the content by summarizing and arranging your ideas differently. I have given my general comments below and specific comments are given after that. Good luck!!

General comments
 * I would like a brief introduction on what Rheotaxis is at the very beginning. For an example break down the word into meaningful components and explain (Rheo which means current or flow, and taxis means movements). Many people / students come to read Wikipedia and expect an answer to what they are looking for within first two or three sentences. Before getting into the mechanisms, you must state what it is. Rheotaxis is not only limited to fish, but also it can be seen in aquatic invertebrates and even in bacteria. Therefore, start by telling what it is, which species demonstrate this behaviour, why they do so, etc.
 * In addition to the citation, you should include the full references at the end of your article for anyone who is interested in reading further. I could not find many of these citations.
 * You have spent a lot of time explaining the outcomes of each research paper. Instead, this section should summarize your findings giving the reader a general idea of Rheotaxis mechanisms in fish or other species. Think of it as though you are explaining these concepts to a high school student. It doesn’t have to be super detailed, but you can mention key main factors on Rheotaxis and few more interesting facts.
 * Before writing the description plan what you want to say in each paragraph. Map it in a way so that you start giving very general broader ideas in the first paragraph and then specific information towards the end. However, key is to understand this is intended for a general audience.

Specific comments
 * Throughout your article, please check how to cite references. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Citing_sources
 * At the start of the third paragraph - “While most fish exhibit their rheostatic behavior based on different sensory input such as vision, olfactory and touch. There are also other environmental mechanisms that play a role of rheostatic in aquatic animals, light (phototaxis), temperature (Dodson, Young, 1977) and fluid flow (Burbano et al, 2021).” This sentence is a good example of summarizing a few studies into a simple sentence.
 * Later on in the third paragraph – “The fish in this study were observed taking advantage of the vortex wakes to help maintain upstream swimming thru passive propulsion. In a similar study, even in the absence of visual cues, juvenile Zebrafish use flow velocity gradients as navigational aids and maintain positive rheostatic (Burbano et al, 2021). It was observed that Common Shiners that photoperiods also had an impact in the upstream movement, but was closely tied to the increase in temperature (Dodson, Young, 1977).” No need to explain outcome of the different studies. You can summarise the outcomes and give references at the end.
 * At the end of this paragraph - “The human impact to the aquatic environment may takes years of extensive study to fully understand, if that is even possible. More research has to also be conducted to identify how anthropomorphic input impact has on the rheotaxis behavior of fish and other aquatic animals. Data suggest that sub-lethal stormwater exposure can negatively impact sensory function, potentially impairing prey capture, predator avoidance, and rheotaxis (Young et al, 2018).” Condense all these into one or two sentences and indicate anthropogenic inputs can have negative effect on rheotaxis and then give references
 * In the paragraph on schooling fish, the sentence – “There are two hypotheses that magnetoreceptors are located in olfactory cells which allows fish to exhibit rheostatic behavior. The second hypothesis is that magnetite crystals are located also in the lateral line, which allow for fish to experience magneto-sensations. (i.e. magneto-rheotactic” behavior) (Cresci et al, 2017).” Not necessary to include this level of detail
 * At the end of the schooling fish paragraph – “When there is moderate to high noise within the neighbors orientation, the shoal size increases, but school alignment decreases and rheotaxis does not improve. (Chicoli et al, 2016)” The detail is not necessary.

JoGDelta (talk) 19:19, 10 April 2021 (UTC)