User talk:TanishaNair/sandbox

Talk page --TanishaNair (talk) 16:25, 31 January 2018 (UTC)

Hi. You have a great collection of sources. Make sure you are not duplicating anything already on the page and prepare your ideas to post on the talk page of the site to show what changes you want to make. Lethornton (talk) 22:36, 1 March 2018 (UTC) Great work organizing what you want to say and expanding the sections. You need to get your sources in as official links instead of the (#) that is typed in. Keep polishing to get your writing ready for peer review. It also is important to add links to other articles whenever you talk about something found elsewhere in wikipedia. Lethornton (talk) 21:55, 16 March 2018 (UTC) Rooshnam (talk) 00:52, 28 March 2018 (UTC) Rooshna Mohsin- Peer Review 
 * Cultivation:
 * I would link meso- & south America, not everyone knows the region/climate of it well, or you can explain it
 * Also I’d hyperlink inflorescence so readers can look into that as well
 * Crop:
 * “Baby lima beans planted in early June and harvested about 10-12 weeks later to be processed”
 * -Edit to: “Baby lima beans are planted in June and harvested…..”
 * If there’s any more information on the production increase of lima beans in western NY, I think it would be beneficial to explain what caused the population growth
 * Pathogen/Disease:
 * I think you did a really good job with this section! You really explained everything in this section well
 * Definitely link downy mildew if there is a wiki page on it, or explain it
 *  Predators/Hosts:
 * Remove the colon after the scientific name of the spider mites & link the wiki page
 * “Spider mites pose the greatest threat to …”
 * Nutrition/Cooking:
 * This was another really well versed section! The only thing I would say here is maybe put the last sentence on Vitamin B as the last sentence of paragraph one of this section
 *  Defenses:

Awesome job with this section and on the evolution section, I don’t think I have any comments to make on these two!
 *  Other Predators:

: Mention the herbivore predator on the list in the predator section, and then specify about the defense from this organism in the defense section in its own paragraph
 * Overall you did a really great job; great sources, lots of information, and well phrased explanation of everything. I put in my suggestions on how to fix little errors, and overall grammar. The tone of the article was kept really neutral and simply informative. I think you could move the Nutrition/Cooking section to be either before or after the crop section, it seems kind of out of place within the predators and defenses section! Great job!
 * Overall you did a really great job; great sources, lots of information, and well phrased explanation of everything. I put in my suggestions on how to fix little errors, and overall grammar. The tone of the article was kept really neutral and simply informative. I think you could move the Nutrition/Cooking section to be either before or after the crop section, it seems kind of out of place within the predators and defenses section! Great job!

Instructor comments: I like the sections that you have added. They will be helpful to the current page. You might need to work some of your writing into the current page to make it flow nicely with what is already there. Currently, your references are not formatted correctly. You need to get everything into the Wikipedia format for the works cited and have all of the sentences correctly indicating the reference at the end. It is hard to see which papers are used for each bit of information that you are describing. I like that you have used a lot of links out to other sections. That is important. Lethornton (talk) 22:07, 15 April 2018 (UTC)