User talk:Tasmia.r/sandbox

Hi! I am Tasmia and I'm a freshman. I'm from DC but currently staying on campus. I am planning on pursuing pre-law and major in either business or political science.

Hi Tasmia.r! Good job on the article! I think that the content has added and improved the overall quality of the article. The contributions offer a more descriptive description of some of the examples of participatory budgeting and its experimentation. The strengths of the content added is that it adds a perspective on the criticisms and it is well cited throughout all the paragraphs. I think one way this article can be improved is if the author adds a "methods" section in front of the outcomes section so that there is an added sense of coherence and organization throughout the article. Hope this helps! Bryankjh (talk) 02:11, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Peer review feedback
Hi Tasmia, Great job on your draft! I really like how you included more recent examples on the outcome of participatory budgeting and I think that definitely provides more insight on the topic. Adding more to the criticism also contributes to a more balanced article so great job on that too! Here's just a few very minor areas for improvement that I think you can implement:) -Under the outcomes section, it might be helpful to list the three outcomes in the beginning, then separate outcome by country since you have examples from the Dominican Republic and later Brazil. This structure might make it easier for readers.

-For each outcome, I don't think you need to state "research has shown", since it might be confusing without context of what research it is/who conducted it. I think it would be better if you stated these outcomes more like facts, since the research has already been cited. I hope this was helpful! H.Susanna (talk) 18:19, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hey! I think the outcome section is off to a pretty good start. Within the section, you are citing multiple articles which shows that there are multiple sources corroborating your claims. One thing I suggest structurally would be to split the outcome section into 3 subsections: government transparency, citizen's overall well-being, and citizen's attitudes. In my opinion, this organization makes it easier to read and understand the biggest outcomes of participatory budgeting. Overall, good job especially keeping a neutral tone and staying relevant to your topic! Ryanliou (talk) 20:42, 13 October 2020 (UTC)