User talk:Tayyy123/Child marriage in Democratic Republic of the Congo

Stephanie's Peer Review Srios10 (talk) 03:27, 4 April 2022 (UTC)
1. What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? This could be information, writing, etc. that you think your classmate should not change and/or should expand on. Hi! First, I would like to congratulate you on a very well written article. I am assuming you both are revamping the current article and think you have done a great job in the sections you have added to already. I enjoyed the information you provided in the article and thought you did a great job of introducing the topic and providing statistics. I enjoyed that you addressed what child marriage was and proceeded to add statistics to help understand how many children are affected by child marriage.

2. Where do you see room for improvement or further development? Make sure to explain why these changes would improve the article. It is a bit difficult to provide information in a neutral way, but you did a fantastic job of providing this information in such a manner. The only thing I could see room for improvement in is the word choice for transition words. As an example, in the first paragraph there is a sentence that begins with “It is said that” and then states the information. I think that portion could be taken off and the information could begin where you say “Roughly” and add the statistics.

3. What's the most important thing the authors could do to improve the article? The most important thing that can be done in the article is simply continuing to do as you have. I enjoyed the way the information was presented, and the information added. I am excited to see the finished product!

4. Is the article well-organized? Does the structure make sense? The article is well organized and has great structure. The headings make it easy to understand what the article will be discussing, and they seem like they will be covering a multitude of important information. The paragraphs are well organized and written.

5. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! Yes! I am writing on child marriage in South Sudan, so I enjoyed reading some of the similar effects child marriage has on women in the Democratic Republic of the Congo. I liked that you added a section on traditions. I think it is important because it will give us some insight on past traditions and maybe help explain why it is so prevalent in the DRC.

6. As a reader, what else would you like to know about this topic? As a reader one thing I would like to know about this topic is the consequences that child marriage has on child brides. However, seeing the structure of your Wiki assignment I see you have a section dedicated to the effects of child marriage and the impact that it has on girls. Stephanie Rios Srios10 (talk) 03:27, 4 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Hi, thank you so much!! Good luck on your paper. Tayyy123 (talk) 00:21, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much for your peer review. We'll definitely take into account your suggestions, and good luck on your article. Jilee99 (talk) 04:24, 11 April 2022 (UTC)

Mandip's Peer Review
First of all, well done on a nicely written article! The article is presented in a very informative and clearly structured way. The lead does a good job of introducing the topic of Child Marriage in the DRC, and prefaces the following information well too. I also like all the subheadings that y'all have included, as I think that they cover most of the important sections of your topic. I can't wait to see how you guys will expand on those! I am most interested in seeing how you will expand on the "Stopping Child Marriage" section. My topic also covers child marriage, so it is really informative, seeing the statistics and effects of child marriage on other parts of Africa as well. One improvement I would suggest is sentence structure, so that each part of the article flows more smoothly. Right now, certain parts are choppy and changing up how the sentences are written could help your article's presentation! Mbagri (talk) 03:55, 4 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your peer review! We will work on making the article more clear and well-written. Tayyy123 (talk) 00:22, 9 April 2022 (UTC)

Jacqueline's Peer Review
What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? This could be information, writing, etc. that you think your classmate should not change and/or should expand on.
 * 1) Great article! You had a very informative article. You had extensive percentages that helped show the accuracy of the information. The introduction paragraph did well in introducing the topic to the readers.

Where do you see room for improvement or further development? Make sure to explain why these changes would improve the article.
 * 1) I feel as though certain sections should be expanded as they are important to the topic. For example, the section on tradition should've been expanded as I feel it has a big role in child marriage situations. Other sections should also be expanded.

What's the most important thing the authors could do to improve the article?
 * 1) The most important thing the authors could do to improve the article is to add more meat to the sections on traditions and laws. Also, the article can have some pictures added to it.

Is the article well-organized? Does the structure make sense?
 * 1) Yes the article is well-organized. All the sections are well organized and separate each section.

Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
 * 1) I noticed that my article lacks sufficient use of percentages and sources that offer empirical insights.

As a reader, what else would you like to know about this topic? [Of course, this information may not be readily available in all cases, but it can help generate interesting directions for their research]
 * 1) As a reader, I would like to know more about the future of children married young. I want to know if the divorce rates are higher, are the unemployment rates high, and or the poverty rates high ?  — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jackylopez123 (talk • contribs) 06:42, 4 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Hi, thank you! We will add pictures and more statistics. Thank you for your idea to discuss the impacts of child marriage on unemployment, poverty, and divorce. We will now add that. Tayyy123 (talk) 00:25, 9 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi, thank you for your peer review. We'll look into adding more statistics and search for more empirical information. We'll also look to expand our section on tradition. Thank you, and good luck on your article. Jilee99 (talk) 04:25, 11 April 2022 (UTC)