User talk:Tayyy123/Child marriage in Democratic Republic of the Congo/Srios10 Peer Review

Stephanie's Peer Review Srios10 (talk) 03:53, 4 April 2022 (UTC)
1. What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? This could be information, writing, etc. that you think your classmate should not change and/or should expand on. Hi! First, I would like to congratulate you on a very well written article. I am assuming you both are revamping the current article and think you have done a great job in the sections you have added to already. I enjoyed the information you provided in the article and thought you did a great job of introducing the topic and providing statistics. I enjoyed that you addressed what child marriage was and proceeded to add statistics to help understand how many children are affected by child marriage.

2. Where do you see room for improvement or further development? Make sure to explain why these changes would improve the article. It is a bit difficult to provide information in a neutral way, but you did a fantastic job of providing this information in such a manner. The only thing I could see room for improvement in is the word choice for transition words. As an example, in the first paragraph there is a sentence that begins with “It is said that” and then states the information. I think that portion could be taken off and the information could begin where you say “Roughly” and add the statistics.

3. What's the most important thing the authors could do to improve the article? The most important thing that can be done in the article is simply continuing to do as you have. I enjoyed the way the information was presented, and the information added. I am excited to see the finished product!

4. Is the article well-organized? Does the structure make sense? The article is well organized and has great structure. The headings make it easy to understand what the article will be discussing, and they seem like they will be covering a multitude of important information. The paragraphs are well organized and written.

5. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! Yes! I am writing on child marriage in South Sudan, so I enjoyed reading some of the similar effects child marriage has on women in the Democratic Republic of the Congo. I liked that you added a section on traditions. I think it is important because it will give us some insight on past traditions and maybe help explain why it is so prevalent in the DRC.

6. As a reader, what else would you like to know about this topic? As a reader one thing I would like to know about this topic is the consequences that child marriage has on child brides. However, seeing the structure of your Wiki assignment I see you have a section dedicated to the effects of child marriage and the impact that it has on girls.