User talk:Tburch33/sandbox

Assignment 1
Hi, I agree that the article has some problems. For example, this sentence in the lead: "The Crimson Tide is among the most storied and decorated football programs in NCAA history." I don't think it passes the muster of objectivity. And your point about the disputed number of championships is well taken, but I don't think you should just go and make that change. First of all, this assignment is supposed to be about copyediting, which is different than fact-checking. And secondly, if you make that change, it may not stay on the site, and you may received some pushback from other editors. If you're really invested in the topic (and it shouldn't be just because you're a Tigers fan), you can test the waters by bringing the issue up on the article talk page. See if you get any responses from other editors and manage to reach a consensus about appropriate wording. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:10, 8 February 2015 (UTC)
 * For this assignment, you should find a different article. One that needs help with grammar and clarity. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:10, 8 February 2015 (UTC)
 * The changes you suggest for Tigers Football make sense. They have to do with updating the info rather than copyediting, but it's a useful edit, so go ahead. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:41, 10 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Did you forget to make the edits? Josef Horáček (talk) 22:33, 17 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Sorry I thought I completed the final edits to the article and saved the changes but I guess that was not the case. Just seeing this as I am just getting home from out of town and the changes should be updated now Tburch33 (talk) 17:41, 19 February 2015 (UTC)Thomas Burch

Source Update Article
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lafayette,_Louisiana
 * I like the article you selected, but your sources are not up to par. For this assignment, you are required to find sources using the LSU library website (catalog, databases, links to government documents). Josef Horáček (talk) 18:16, 16 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Are my new sources up to par? If so, do I just integrate them into my article by creating a smaller citation for each new reference and then add that cite to where the article states "Citation Needed"? Just trying to make sure I have everything in line. Thanks. Tburch33 (talk) 17:46, 19 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Your sources are good, and you added them the right way. Only one error: fix the all caps in "Revisiting Palermo." Josef Horáček (talk) 18:53, 24 February 2015 (UTC)

Lead Analysis Assignment 3
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Judge_Joe_Brown

Though I believe that the article does have many good points about Judge Joe Brown television show, I concede that the article does not focus on the person who the show is about enough. For instance nothing is made of Joe Brown's early life nor his personal life. It also seems a bit biased against the show by stating many conflicts that the show endured and not enough about how well the show actually did. The writer also seems to have a condescending tone at times when talking about the shows success being attributed to being linked with the show Judge Judy. The article needs some more balance to be sufficient. Tburch33 (talk) 15:35, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Those are good comments. I wonder how many of these problems you can alleviate with a better lead, without having to do too much research and editing. See what you can do. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:02, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
 * By the way, you're not using the word "concede" correctly. The concession is in the first part of the sentence. It should go like this: "Though I concede that..., I also believe that..." Josef Horáček (talk) 19:02, 24 February 2015 (UTC)

Lead Edit Assignment 3
"Judge Joe Brown'' is an American arbitration-based reality court show that premiered on September 14, 1998 and ran through the 2012-13 television season. Judge Joe Brown was the first African-American television courtroom show and has attributed to the additions of other courtroom television series such as Judge Mathis played by Greg Mathis. Joe Brown was the second highest paid daytime television personality behind only Judge Judy during the time the show was up and running. The first-run syndication series entered its 15th and final season on September 10, 2012, also regularly airing in high-definition for the first time beginning in that same season as well. Tburch33 (talk) 21:51, 25 February 2015 (UTC)
 * This will work. Comments: 1. In the second sentence, do you mean "the first courtroom show featuring an Af-Am judge"? 2. In "up and running," delete the "up and." 3. Spell out "fifteenth." Josef Horáček (talk) 08:59, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Nice work, but you should clean up the appearance: no italics and no quotation marks at the beginning. Josef Horáček (talk) 03:58, 10 March 2015 (UTC)